Beautiful. Your words do a great job of sneaking into those humanly characteristics like "patchy hair on my legs the razor missed", that would otherwise go unnoticed by another soul, but so deeply noticed by yours. It really does feel like a game; trying to find a distraction to those "imperfection", that are not even imperfect, but human. You said it yourself, "legs rooted deeply into the earth". We really are just earth after all. This poem can be read as somber, or bright, which in my opinion is hard to do sometimes. So kudos to you. I have no suggestions, it's beautiful.
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