A/N: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
"I'll give you five bucks
if you take her cart."
I look at the lady,
"It's not going to be that hard."
Taking my friends dare,
I dash across the Goodwill,
and go near the lady,
who was standing still.
She turns around
and clotheslines me.
The hit was so hard
I couldn't breathe.
"Step away, Sonny!
I'll wreck ya!"
The lady kicks my side,
and heads off.
"I doubt you could!"
My friend yells from a distance.
As soon as I look up,
the lady is sprinting.
"Elbow drop!"
she yells as she nears.
My vision is blurry,
forming actual tears.
Her elbow lands
right on my chest,
making me scream
as I lose my breath.
"One! Two!
Three!"
Someone yells,
but I couldn't see.
As soon as I was done,
wishing I was dead,
she delivers a chair shot,
straight to my head.
My friend laughs,
the ladies cheers.
When I got up,
the crowd expressed jeers.
I lost a wrestling match today.
This may sound crazy,
but it was to a wrestling champion
in their mid eighties.
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Oh wow, that was sooo funny! I really did not expect the elderly person to be a wrestler... I like how you portrayed the narrator, thinking it would be so easy to take from the old lady but quickly realizing he'd made a big mistake. Good poem, really amusing.
This was pretty funny , respect your elders before they "wreck ya" . Haha .
Anyways Kat here to review .
So yeah my second humorous poem review of the day , this one had more laughing humor which is cool to see two different styles of humor in poetry ( something I'm not expirenced with ) .
I mean I just really don't know what to say I'm still processing it all XD but one thing I did notice is an inconsistent rhyme scheme . From the looks of it you tried to have an a b c b scheme but if you re-read this poem a few of the words don't quite qualify as rhyming and I'm not sure if you noticed . Also the eighth stanza IS significantly shorter than all the other stanzas so you might want to consider revising but honestly , the humors keeps people from noticing much wrong here .
All in all a nice light read which is refreshing , I don't usually find to many funny poems on yws but good job with this one .
~Kat
I laughed a lot at this. If this really happened...you have some bad luck strange..just saying. If not, how did you come up with this? Lesson to learn here. Dont steal carts! ( they could be from wrestling champions in there eighties!). The last part was my favourite.
"I lost a wrestling match today.
This may sound crazy,
but it was to a wrestling champion
in their mid eighties."
It perfectly sums up everything.