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THIS IS GOOD - TAKE IT SOMEWHERE.
(I've started titling reviews, see above, wellIhaven'tstartedthisisaoneoff.)
So this is fantastic, I'm not going to delve into great details because it was too damn short to extract any issues. I will say this though, this premise, this framing device is so well handled I would challenge you to extend it to something serious. Put the cat into a home, have it show affection between two in a couple. Have the relationship break down and them fight over who get's what, hurling it all over the apartment, have the cat hide under a bed listening to breaking glass and slamming doors. Then have them fight over her, call it something vague and suggestive 'pieces,' or 'the little things.' Write this story for me and I will critique it, I will take it and write it with you adding what I can. We will change the world.
Forgive me, I'm tired. But dead serious. Take this and make it great, it is fun as is but you are better, don't waste this wonderful framing device on this light piece, blow minds.
Oh, and read this
http://classiclit.about.com/library/bl- ... in-dog.htm
Right now.
Seriously, it's probably one of the most memorable stories I have read and it will give you an idea how you can get away with serious cat-tails(all pun, baby). Also read this,
http://www.carversite.com/story.html
/Tired-stupor-rant
Night.
I'm not really a cat person, but I really liked your piece. It was interesting to take a look into the mind of an animal. I always love that. I didn't see any spelling/grammar mistakes, which was nice. Keep up the good work
Hey, this was a good piece. Funny and witty
. I really got some interesting insight into a cat's perspective. I will sure remember this the next time I try to shoo a cat from the window 
. A thoroughly entertaining work. Keep writing and best of luck 
What a cat! I love the way you put the story in the cat's perspective. Did it happen to you? Cause it did to me!
Anyway,
Very interesting story, I am not bored or anything maybe because it was short? But I prefer it to be like this
There's nothing wrong about this story grammatically. I just didnt like the way WOMAN HUMAN sounds. I dont know but maybe change it a little? Anyway that's just my opinion.
Sorry for my very short review. Keep writing and God Bless! ( wait a minute! Did you continue the Harry Potter Twitterized? I would love to read another one! thanks )