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i was never afraid of marriage
just of myself in the context of marriage
bound to someone who would have
to see me in all my sicknesses
and i wouldn't be able to lock myself
in my room for hours like i used to
i worry one day, you'll take a sip
of water with your throat coated in dryness
and you will realize you've become so sick
of me sooner than i had hoped—health
would become a thing of the past
and we would grow distant—resentful, even
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First thoughts? You described this melancholic feeling like no other could've. What I mean is, it's very well written and also something I relate to.
"i was never afraid of marriage
just of myself in the context of marriage
bound to someone who would have
to see me in all my sicknesses
and i wouldn't be able to lock myself
in my room for hours like i used to"
Fear of vulnerability is something a lot of us unfortunately suffer through to the point where even when life gets better and someone who genuinely cares comes to one's life, we tend to build suffocating walls around us so that they don't see who we really are. And something like marriage? It does the exact opposite. Thus it just makes sense to decide to never marry at all because why would we want someone to see us at our weak moments right?
"i worry one day, you'll take a sip
of water with your throat coated in dryness
and you will realize you've become so sick
of me sooner than i had hoped—health
would become a thing of the past
and we would grow distant—resentful, even"
That's so saddening honestly I don't know what to say. But then again relationships of any kind aren't supposed to be all sunshine and rainbows and if the person leaves during hard times, more often than not it says something about them more than the person who gets abandoned which is just a personal opinion.
Alright that's all, amazing poem!!!keep writing ^^
I like how the poem focuses not just on love itself, but on the fear of being “stuck” in a relationship where distance and resentment could slowly grow and the idea of worrying about becoming a burden or being resented over time adds emotional depth and realism. While the structure is simple, that actually strengthens the emotional impact because it feels direct and unfiltered. Overall, it captures complex feelings about love, fear, and vulnerability in a clear and heartfelt way.
greetings! i liked this poem. It's short in a way where it leaves up to for interpretation and keeps the ending a bit vague. I see this poem to be a person struggling with mental health or a chronic condition and being scared of what people might think if they saw the "real" you. the constant fear of a loved one getting tired of you being unwell and them giving up on you and stuff. it also shows that this person may not want to be sick of you in a way. I can also see how this sort of irrational thought can stay in your head until something does happen like a breakup, fight, or just generally growing apart like the speaker worries about and then tell themself its because they became sick of them. i liked that you expressed yourself in a clear way in this poem and the ending made me feel a bit comforted. thank you for writing this, have a nice day!