Hello, E.E for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.
So, first thing first. I did not notice any grammar or spelling mistakes so that is fantastic. Some one else might though! The flow was great and the use of metaphors and things alike was good to. Imagery was spectacular as well. It was lovely picturing galaxies covered picturing brilliant swirls of orange and red and yellow.
Now is when I dissect your poem and see if I can't get its meaning right! So, you are telling us that we have been raised to think about the worst of people, to see their flaws and nothing more. We have been raised to see only what others want and see the fake things in what should be the real stuff. Society has us down grade ourself and make us see ourself like we are some mutt. Something that no one wants. Ever. You know that one day after another a girl will change herself to hope, even for a little, that she will fit in. You know that she will change herself for just an ounce of spotlight and make herself something she is not and should never ever change herself because it is not what she wants but then again, its what society wants and thats what matters right? That others care if we have perfect eyebrows and butts? That we use the right blush and aren't emo? That you aren't a girl who loves video games? That you aren't a guy and where a skirt? Please, this society SUCKS. This is what this poem is practically screaming at us, no? Or is it something personal that you are dealing with?
Otherwise, I loved the poem and keep up the good work! Happy Halloween! I need to go now, Grim has some more dead to reap and I ran out of cocoa for him. Cheerios and fruit loops to you!
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