Hello again! I decided to stop by and leave a review for your other lovely poem! So, to begin, this poem seems to be even more relaxed in style compared to the first one that I read. For example, instead of writing you, you use the letter. You don't use capitalization in this poem, either or any periods or commas. I like how you open the poem by asking us a question:
what does rain make u think of?
This poem seems to be a reflection. I love these opening lines where you tell us about how some people are washed away, well, others still live with the pain. Personally, I am a person who loves the rain, so I connected really deeply to that metaphor. I also did like the line where you said "sweet coldness soft coziness", you did a great job with alliteration here. I feel like this poem could really benefit from some more line breaks, or commas or periods. Some of the lines are just hard to follow, because you can't really tell when one thought leads into another. At the same time, you did a great job crafting some really beautiful poetic statements, here! I would love to see more imagery, or descriptions of this rain, or these feelings that you were describing. You mentioned how you want to be colored in your shade, maybe you could even include details of what these colors look like or how they would make you feel. I like that repetition of the word pattern. He did a great job throughout this poem keeping my attention!
Overall, great poem! It was a little bit hard for me to follow along, but I still loved it a lot. You have a nice poetic voice. Something about it feels really dramatic, but simple at the same time. Keep writing!
Your friend,
Ellie
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