Such creative formatting! I love the variety of formatting tools / images you're using in this. The edges of the paper also give it an older feeling - which goes well with that final line "Never lost, just forgotten". Well done!
Such creative formatting! I love the variety of formatting tools / images you're using in this. The edges of the paper also give it an older feeling - which goes well with that final line "Never lost, just forgotten". Well done!
Oh, this is beautiful!
This poem is just amazingly beautiful! I love it times a million! I love your use of juxtapositions and the pictures you used in the background just fit in so well! The aesthetic is just so perfect, and it matches the poem. This poem tells a much larger story, one of youth and and how time goes one without even really putting emphasis on that, and how amazing finding something forgotten can be.
Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!
Hey zenith, Lee's here to review your poem!
Wow. It's amazing. i could go on and on about how the lines and illustrations are beautiful, but I'll begin with a couple of things I think you can improve.
I think there should be a "that" at the ending of the last line.
As they slowly drifted into oblivion
Are still intact in my head
Where I hoped it would be
Hello, hello! I'm here to review!
I do like the pictures you've used! They fit well, that's for sure. The third line of the poem is among my favorite, mostly because of the use of no man's land. Very nice! I like how each picture just about goes with each stanza, that each stanza has some unique way to its flow yet blends together.
Overall, I don't really have a critique. Others may though, but from what I can tell it seems fine!
- Cow
Hello there,
Poetry is not my strongest point, but I will try to make a decent review.
Okay, language is stunning. It is almost nostalgic. I can see all of this inside of my head because this is so well done. The images included are a little odd, but odd can be good and that's what i'm trying to push on.
It radiates youth in a way. The added aspect of future makes it dreamy, so that is sort of aged. It's strange, yet so normal. I think the way you wrote it made it so brilliant. I normally don't review poetry, but this made me rethink that.
The bold words draw eyes, but I think it would be a good idea to look over them again. I just think they might be used too much, but that is my idea because my poetry style is totally bland.
The closing line really was amazing too. The layout probably made this all it is. It's drifting, and I think that shows through the meaning.
Have a good day,
Haley.
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