The True Throne - (CHAPTER 2)

by YP@17

Published January 6, 2022

E - Everyone

In The True Throne

SXES:

Sxes is the capital of the eastern kingdoms including Sare, Swix, Epsilon.

Even the King of Sxes ruled all these kingdoms. Still, Sare, Swix, and Epsilon have their own rulers as well.

Also, have a political presence in Marian.

The entire kingdom is surrounded by ramparts.

In the Kingdom, there is a mega Beautiful Palace in the middle of the kingdom surrounded by water lines between land and the palace Known As Falcon (Golden Palace), The home of the king of Sxes. The most beautiful and unique structure in all of the kingdoms.

After many years Sxes kingdom evolves as well.

Started with five houses. In five houses, only one house survived.

In the present day, the House head is King of Sxes named King Victor/Vic. King has two wives named Queen Helda and Eydis.

Queen Helda has a son Prince Ariz and a daughter Princess Sylva.

Queen Eydis has one son Prince Egil.

Today, the meeting was held in the chamber where all main council members arrived at the meeting.

Master Azure (Vice King of Sxes) says: "Welcome all."

After King Victor arrives at the chamber.

Everyone greets the King.

King Victor sits on a chair and gives heads up to start the meeting.

Member Representing Slagon, Sir Orah says: "There is a vacancy in Slagon for a new Master."

King says: "Is there any potential candidate in your eyes?"

Sir Orah says: "We had, Sir Snorii from Swix."

King Victor says: "What do you think, Master?"

Master Azure smiled and said calmly: "Sir Snorii, is a rightful choice but I am not sure he is going to leave Swix. The man who already rejected the Master's post of Capital. I don't know, did you already inform him, Sir Orah?"

Sir Orah says: "No, If the King gives the order, then we can send a letter to him."

King says: "If the man is rightful for the post. then, I didn't have any issue with it. You can proceed further with it."

Then economically and politically all decisions get taken in front of the king. After deep discussion, they come with an optimal solution or order which is going to help the eastern kingdoms in the future.

Then, Comes agriculture,

Agriculture Head Sir Ierry says: "This year also, Swix gives plenty of agriculture resources, they are just killing it."

Master Azure says: "Under Reign of Lady Livia, they are showing significant progress."

All council members agreed.

Sir Ierry says: "She is gaining popularity and trust of people day by day."

King Victor says: "I am also hearing lots about her. Is she a good ruler?"

Master Azure says: "We didn't know that, but numbers speak for themselves. Swix produced double the number of resources this year than last year."

Sir Ierry says: "She is a good ruler, She is also a student of Sir Snorii."

Master Azure says: "That's Explained a lot."

King Victor says: "Anyway, Good for Capital we didn't have to worry about food resources this year."

Sir Ierry says: "No, my King there is most people are migrating to capital also our number of people rising day by day."

King Victor says: "So, did we not have enough resources."

Sir Ierry says: "We had King, But I think this year we need to cut some number to the Western Kingdoms."

King Victor says: "Isn't there another way?"

Sir Ierry says: "We calculate all possibilities, it's the best way."

King Victor says: "Then, so be it, send at least an apology letter to the Western Kingdoms."

Sir Ierry says: "We will, my king."

In the End, After Break,

Tally about taxes and services calculation discussed as well.

After meeting over,

king Victor stops Master Azure for discussion.

the king says: "this time we are hard on the West."

Master Azure says: "We are but there is no must we can do. you understand it."

The king says: "Hmm..."

King wasn't pleased by the answer. but he believed in master.

Master Azure says: "I am concerned about the way Epsilon handles the Swix. I am concerned about that issue."

King Victor says: "I don't think so this is not the first time it happens, we know Epsilon methods, I don't think it is good to order them in their politics."

Master Azure says: "but you know Epsilon does not control Swix."

King Victor stops the Master and says: "I think it's better to end this conversion. you keep an eye on this issue if anything big happens, inform me first. don't discuss this topic with others."

King Victor knows how sensitive this topic is. So, he didn't want to make any point directly. He wants a ground report on this topic so that's why he stopped a master.

to change the topic,

the King says: "Epsilon our close ally for years. so, I didn't want to fall into any political mess."

Master says: "I understand, my king. apologies if it makes you feel uncomfortable."

King says: "it's fine. I am glad we discussed it." and he left the chamber.

But the king is deeply concerned about this issue. He also knows that these issues are going to make too many things worse in Eastern Land if it is not handled well.

On the next day, the morning King summons the master.

the master says: "my king, have you summoned me ?"

the king says: "I am going to take a break for someday, so, I am giving you the authority of the King. Would you like to serve the Capital? for some days."

the master says: "I would like to. but, why break now?"

the king says: "I feel some people are trying to make the Capital worse. I am going to keep an eye on them for a few days. "

(king always does this thing he always changes his costumes, personality try to understand peoples in the capital )

So, the master didn't incest that much and

The Master says: "I would like to serve Sxes."

King says: "good, I didn't share with others. But I need some time off."

Master says: "if it's for members or council I can answer them. but I am not sure how to answer both queens."

King says: "just tell them anything like I am going to inspect the wall or anything that you come with it. going to be fine."

Master says: "Sure. my King."

King says: "you are not looking happy to lead Sxes."

Master says: "no, I am happy, it's a pleasure to serve Sxes. even for some days it's like a dream. I am thankful for this opportunity."

King says: "I thought too much on it, you are the only person I can trust,

I am counting on you."

Master says:" I try to be my best, and not give any chance to regret your decision."

King smiled and left the room.

The same day in the Evening, King Victor left the Capital.

SWIX:

The Green Kingdom, the kingdom of great farmers.

Beautiful temples with Nature as well as beautiful old houses, Mountains, springs, etc.

The Swix once was ruled by Epsilon.

but, gradually Epsilon became rich after they became that much powerful economically as well as politically. they don't need Swix. So they start losing control over Swix.

So, some families or houses of Swix realize that Epsilon is not going to help them further.

Then, the whole Swix is divided into small houses, nearly about 28 houses.

But, In the present day,

It is majorly ruled by 7 to 10 houses. But as time passed one house became more trustworthy among peoples and it became more powerful than other houses.

But Unfortunately, the House only has one left member who is known as LADY OF SWIX lady Livia/Liv.

Today,

Swix has a small Hall room in the House of Swix for meetings.

So, a meeting was held in the Hall of the house of Lady Livia.

Meeting attended by Master/Sir Snorii or Two truthful warriors name

Knight Kiar and Fonz.

Lady Livia says: "Is there any new news from Epsilon or Sxes?"

Master Snorri says: "no, we didn't receive any news from them."

Lady had the letter in her hand she gave to Knight Kiar.

and says: "Make sure these reach the king of epsilon."

He took a letter and got going.

Master Snorii says: "I got a letter from Sxes about the transfer, you know that I am not going to be here."

Lady Livia says: "Sir, we both know this day will come. It's going too hard here without you. But, Capital needs you more than here."

Master says: "Days go fast. It's like Yesterday, I saw a small girl wandering around That handmade wooden chair. Today, I saw the Lady who turned that wooden chair into a true throne for Swix. You grow up quickly, but still, the throne is not safe. you need to keep an eye on the enemy and allies.it's going to be tough."

Lady says: "I admit it is going to be tough, what I learned from you can help me, get ready old man, It's time to leave these woods. Don't think about Swix that much, Me and the people of Swix can care and nourish the Kingdom just like you teach for years."

Master Snorii really tough man but not this time he cracks a little bit and says: "It's been a nice journey. I enjoy every moment of these. But, it's about, we choose our roads."

Lady says: "You are always there for me, you turned the orphan little girl into the Lady. I am glad for every moment of that journey. I shared it with you."

Master says: "Can I give you the last piece of advice, Don't be too humble and polite. I am really worried about that Innoceness you had."

Lady says: "I will."

The meeting was adjourned by Master Snorii. Lady leaves the hall.

The master stops Knight Fonz.

Master Snorii says: "I am still unsure about my decision."

Knight Fonz says: "It's a hard decision to leave a place that you made for years."

Master says: "It's not that. There are all sorts of things that bother me like the economic crisis Swix going through. then, people who are not going to leave this opportunity to dethrone Lady Liv. If Epsilon or Capital didn't help Swix. It's going too hard to hold Swix together. I wanted you to stand behind the Lady in her decision and do whatever to keep her on the throne. Doesn't matter bad or good. Can you do it?"

Knight Fonz says: "I can and I will."

Master had a smile on his face and said: "I am really glad to train you two."

Knight Fonz says: "What about Roux, Isn't he also among us."

Master Snorii says: "He is my mistake. The rogue student."

Knight Fronz says: "I am sorry. Sir, I hurt you with my words."

Master says: "No, I didn't get hurt at all. It's nice to see my students doing well. They are fearless."

Knight Fronz smiled and said: "It brings back memories, that day you yelled at us."

By imitating Master, Knight Fronz says: "There is a very fine line between fearless and careless. If you can't find it, then get lost from here. It's frightening to see you that angry."

Master laughing says: "Well, you turned out fine, sometimes anger is required to make the will of students stronger."

Knight Fronz says: "It's been a pleasure to train under you, Sir."

and leave the hall.

The next day in the Afternoon, a big farewell was organized by the people of Swix for Master Snorii.

The party, drinking, singing, and magic all turned out well.

and Master Snorii left that evening to the Slagon.

It is really hard for him to leave after that gesture shown by people at a party and farewell.

Under the reign of Lady Livia, Swix rapidly developed in the agricultural field; they took the highest production this year. so, people craved her figure. It's a beautiful statue near an old-grown tree in the middle of the house of Swix.

Swix took the loan from Epsilon for agriculture throughout the year so they passed all sources or production to Epsilon then Epsilon repays them. and then Epsilon sends all resources or production to the Sxes/Capital. then, in Sxes, it decides all distributions.

They took the highest production. but at the same time, they didn't receive that amount from Epsilon. Things are looking bad.

Lady Livia knows there is the right time to take big steps in agriculture but she also really needs money for that.

She had her farm field as well. She is also a farmer. Every family never felt she was a queen or ruler. Everyone who knows her loved her. The popularity of the Lady starts increasing day by day because of her simplicity and trust in the people of Swix.

At the same time, some honorable house of Swix starts feeling worse. They don't like being ruled under a woman, not only in some houses but some conservative-minded people also don't think she can be ruled a Swix.

As usual, Swix was always the victim of a politically disturbed kingdom throughout the years. but the first time a large number of people think it's the right time to make Swix one kingdom with one house to centralize and unite the kingdom.

But, Lady Livia is against these. She didn't want to forcefully rule anyone.

She doesn't think it's the right thing to do. She has trust in Epsilon and Capital/Sxes.

SARE:

Sare's contribution to the eastern kingdom is numerous.

But, politically, they are not in the frame.

Pioneer of economics and education for the Eastern Kingdom.

As well all students trained here for Economics, Politics, Military, Arts

all sorts of Schools present in Sare.

The biggest library in the whole Eastern Kingdom is present in Sare.

The biggest arena is also here.

The biggest marketplace for weapons was also organized in Sare.

Also, the Trading center for the Eastern Kingdom.

Having a beautiful palace at one end of Sare. one of the tallest palaces.

On one side, high mountains, and on the other side are three forts and the remaining side is near-sea.

It is always controlled or ruled by one family.

The contribution of Sare in the Eastern Kingdom is invaluable. Still always under Capital Sxes.

In the present day,

King of Sare named King Ario on the throne and his wife is Queen Herminia. he had five adopted sons named Luke, Theo, Luiz, Yves, Val.

Marian:

The alone island in the Eastern Kingdom. The only Kingdom is not under Capital Sxes. But, financially it is dependent on the other Eastern Kingdom.

Marian, which is rich in stone and iron which helps with weapons.

weapons sold out in sare's market.

Also, only the Kingdom had large ships and boats.

All Eastern Kingdom ships are under Marian.

Surrounded by the sea, most of the income also comes from fishing.

But weapons and fishing don't earn a lot. so, Marian starts selling warriors to Sare in the Arena where betting and battles happen.

Marian was always a land of great warriors.

It also has its own war-style/sierra Marion.

To teach this Sierra there is only one last School left in Marian.

All students who wanted to learn Sierra Marion from the Eastern Kingdom come to teach at the School of Marian.

The School is also the reason Marian still produced great and fearless warriors.

Marian is controlled by one family throughout all years.

Marian is always hard to control for all kings who pass; it is always a politically messy kingdom in the whole Eastern Kingdom.

Today,

It's Under the Reign of King Inez. He had two sons Prince Aldo and Prince Rocio.

EPSILON:

Once was the strongest house that controlled the whole Swix. but they loot the whole Swix now only left with one giant palace known as Epsilon covered with a wall midway between swix and sare.

Three forts on sides of Sare. Once was controlled by Epsilon. But, Today all the forts are held by Sare.

King of Epsilon is King Aristeo and his wife Queen Cilla.

Epsilon was the richest house in the Eastern Kingdom. But days pass and the place loses its shine. Also, gradually losing control over Swix makes them weaker economically. But even today it still holds a good political place in the Capital.

SLAGON:

Far from the wall, The place is in a snowy area surrounded by a great environment with high altitudes.

The place where strong warriors are trained and sent to the wall to protect the wall. This place is the powerhouse of the east.

Slagon is known as "Warrior Born Land". The Sxes, Sare, Swix have too many young talented children who can be used as warriors. These children graduate from the military school of Sare and are then sent to the Slagon. All warriors on WALL trained in Slagon. After they are nourished and trained. They go to the WALL to protect their lands and protect all east.

NO MAN's LAND:

God's land, the dark place is snowy all time. It's hard to survive, a place no one dares to go there.

Black forest:

The Westside of Swix and Capital Sxes all is Black forest.

Forest has many small tribes. no one usually lives there, only tribes live there but they also don't comfortably control the whole forest.

It has been home to animals and many small tribes for years.

Comments & reviews · 2
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Plume
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Plume wrote a review Review · Feb 6, 2022

Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

I read your prologue and first chapter before this so I'd have a little context as to what is going on. Right now, I will say that I'm not exactly sure where this seems to be going. It seems like what I imagine something like Game of Thrones to be like (I've never read or watched game of thrones, by the way). It just seems very political without plot. I think your worldbuilding and characters are great, but it just needs a character or plot to focus on.

Moving on to good things: I think your worldbuilding is great!! You've created this very in depth universe that I adore, though again, like other reviews have mentioned, you're prone to infodumping it on the reader. The world reminds me a lot of the one in The Priory of the Orange Tree, which I really enjoyed. I love how diverse and believable each area is; it'd also be fun to have a sort of map, too— not sure how visually talented you are, but there are some programs online that can help!

I also think your characters are strong. The exchanges are especially strong. In this one specifically, I really enjoyed the character of Master Snorii. He seems quite wise, and it was entertaining to read about his relationships with his students. One thing about your dialogue I noticed was that you tend to use colons. Dialogue is traditionally formatted like this:

"Is there any new news from Epsilon or Sxes?" says Lady Livia.


The way you wrote it makes it sound a lot like a script, which I honestly think could work for this as well. You don't use much action in between your dialogue, which is generally okay in a script, but doesn't immerse your reader as well in a novel.

Overall: nice start! I think with a bit of cleaning up and working on the plot, this could be a great story!! I hope to read more soon! I see you've published chapters three and four— I'll be sure to read those soon! Until next time!!

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Horisun
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Horisun wrote a review Review · Jan 7, 2022

Hello! I hope this review finds you well! Sorry it took me awhile to get to this; I've been a tad bit busy in real life recently.
Overall, I really felt this was a huge step up from the last chapter, as the purpose of your story is becoming more apparent. We are starting to see more hints of future conflict, and getting a sense of direction to where this whole thing is going.
Furthermore, I'm super, super excited about the characters you are introducing! Specifically Lady Liv. I'm excited to see what you do with her character in the future!
Also, I love the interaction between Livia and Master Snorii. The line "It's been a nice journey." really put a smile on my face. I got the vibe that he sees her as his adopted daughter, and I really hope you explore their friendship in later chapters.
I do have a few nitpicks here and there, however. I feel like you could improve your introduction by, instead of giving all that information at once, scattering it throughout the following paragraphs.
For example, instead of opening with a list of all the Kingdoms and their responsibilities, you could start with the King anxiously awaiting the arrival of the other dignitaries, and reflecting on his Kingdoms checkered past. Then, as each of them arrive, you could perhaps give a brief overview of each new character.
That's just one suggestion though. You could tackle this in dozens of different ways that may make your first paragraph a tad more engaging.
Following this, I would also suggest cutting a few unnecessary details about the world. If it doesn't contribute to either the plot or the characters, you may wish to consider leaving it out entirely. This is because if a story has too much noise, the readers could become disengaged, or it may slow the pace of the story far too much. However, what you cut out and what you leave in is completely up to you.
One last thing! I noticed you don't tend to describe your characters appearances. I myself usually don't mind when I writer does this to some extent; however, it does make it hard to picture your story, and I would recommend giving physical descriptions of your leads, at least.
Bonus! Describing some characters, but not all, is a good way to highlight those who are important to the narrative. Looking at published works, you may notice how the more essential a character is to the story, the more time will be dedicated to their appearances!

To conclude, this was an incredible follow up to the previous chapter, and I am so excited to see what else you have in store! Your characters interactions were fantastic, just as they were last time, and even though there is room for improvement when it comes to how and when you describe your setting, I still really enjoy the concept of your world, and I truly think it has a ton of potential! Keep on writing! I'll see you next time! :D

YP@17 replied · Jan 8, 2022

Thanx!! it is great feedback. will work on it.



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