I can't figure out if the title is trying to be some catchy texting-lingo that I'm just not understanding, or if it's accidentally misspelled. If it's some sort of catchy saying, I'm not sure it's very accessible.
I think the poem was an interesting take on trying to do sort of a casual rap, about something very serious, and that's a hard balance to take, because you don't want talk about suicide to seem flippant, but you seemed to cover it going in too deep.
The different types of slang in the poem added a nice song-like flow to the piece, I think the strongest stanza was the second one, that had very nice rhyme and rhythm to it, I think if you could develop the other stanzas a bit more to match that one, it'd have a lot of song potential in its flow.
One part I found particularally problematic was in the third stanza,
Willing to hurt anyone / but protecting our pride / life's at a point of low tide
I really hope that you aren't implying that people who are suicidal don't care about hurting other people because they are really prideful? I don't understand what this stanza is saying at all, but I think it needs to be clarified or taken out, to avoid implying that people who suffer from suicidal ideation are really self-centered, which is just not true.
I think it's great that you decided to try to tackle a serious topic like this in your poetry, since it's not talked about enough, but when talking about mental illness, and these really sensitive issues, it's important not to make sweeping generalizations about the causes or about people in general. In a very short poem it can be difficult to address that complexity, but I do think it's important to consider.
The last stanza I found to be the weakest, and could no understand the different question marks and then the random heart emoji at the end, I think I'm missing something there but it seemed a bit unfinished.
Overall interesting idea, some solid rhyming, but in my opinion needs a bit of polishing and a serious look at stanza 3 & 4.
Good luck in editing!
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