(HI again! some would know me, because of my old account here VoidBrain... Have fun and enjoy while reading my essay about the Advantages of Technology)
Alfred North Whitehead once said, “Civilization advances by extending the number of important operations which we can perform without thinking of them.” There are a lot of earnings from technology that we may get and apply in our everyday lives. People, nowadays, have a continuous perspective in looking at technology in its every side; an outlook that we can see and apply in every field that our generation has right now; a manifestation that we can relate with various ways of ideas in life. In this case, technology can be seen as an advantage in the fields of communication, business and education.
"While technology has its draw backs, if used properly, it can make managing children in two households a lot easier.” This is very evident in the households of OFW dependent families since the OFWs actually live in the other parts of the world while their families are stuck here in the Philippines. Through technology, the great distance which separates them are closed since they can now talk to each other without even bothering to fly to the place of the other. Therefore, technology can indeed bridge gaps that exist between people living in distant places. Hence, the importance of the role of technology in this aspect is very imminent—it creates communication links which answers the problems that people face when they do not occupy the same place at once. This is more emphasized by this statement of Colin McWay, president of Mutualink, “When it comes to emergencies, Mutualink enables a world without borders, and as demonstrated in the recent Japan disaster, a key component of resiliency is the ability for critical partners across all sectors to work together in synchronization.”
Technology even plays a bigger role in business; in fact, through the use of technology, the production process becomes faster. This can be evidenced by the experience of the company Coloplast. They said, “The changeover speed was increased by 20 % when Coloplast, via Technology Partnership, found the solution to a problem with bulges in an adhesive film.” Thus, this shows that the company has really benefited a lot from the benefits of technology—it did not just decrease the time used in production, but it also gave a more efficient yield. Not only does technology enter the business picture in this regard; in fact, sources say that investment banks and other dealers have far more complex technology requirements, as they have to interface with multiple exchanges, brokers and multi-dealer platforms, as well as their own pricing, P&L, trade processing and position-keeping systems. Hence showing that businesses, these days, already incorporate technology in their business processes which even more amplifies the huge advantage that technology offers today’s society.
It is undeniable that without technology students will really find a hard time doing and finishing up their requirements. Without the help of Google, students will waste a lot of time searching the whole library for something which Google can give in a single click. Moreover, what if a school's library is outdated or lacking in a selection of titles? Surely, a student might find it difficult to compile the necessary research for an essay or research paper. Hence, this shows how technology provides an easier way for students to cope with the loads of school stuff which need to be settled by students. The edge on education is not only confined to giving students an easier way of answering their assignments; moreover, a survey found that many teachers said technology could be a useful educational tool. With the variety of websites online, a student can access different educational sites which can aid their lessons in school. For instance, a student which cannot get a topic say in Algebra in a single lecture can access YouTube and search for the online Algebra videos of renowned professors. Thus, the student would not need to schedule a consultation with his/her professor anymore, and this is not just with Algebra, but it is applicable to a lot of other school subjects as well.
With these statements that are said in my researches, I might say that we already have the technology on our side. Technology, a gift where we all benefit through the field of communication, business, and education. A side where all of us can tell that technology really is a part of our history. It is used by almost all of the people living in this world to communicate their love ones from other countries. Where students can study easily and learn in a click on the mouse of the computer. The innovation of technology in the field of business made countries to be a well industrialized country.
References:
Technology Makes Communication Easier. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://www.hessfamilylaw.com/index.php/blog/37-technology-makes-communication-easier
Anytime, anywhere communications across all devices enhances collaboration. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://www.homelandsecuritynewswire.com/anytime-anywhere-communications-across-all-devices-enhances-collaboration
Faster changeover and production at Coloplast. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://www.technology-partnership.com/17010
Electronic trading. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Electronic_trading
Studying with technology. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://www.jerkmagazine.net/featured-slider/studying-with-technology.html
Technology Changing How Students Learn, Teachers Say. Retrieved August 28, 2013 from http://www.nytimes.com/2012/11/01/education/technology-is-changing-how-students-learn-teachers-say.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0
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Very well said.
You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
Very well said!
Yes...technology made everyone's life easier and all generations truly benefit on it. It really gives lots of advantage to young generations. As for me, modern technology in communication ease the loneliness being apart from my family. Though I am miles away, I can still feel their presence and vice versa.
yes...technology makes lot of advantages to ease everyone's life....
While I think you're ultimately right that technology is on our side, I think it comes with some drawbacks as well. Most notably, it promotes laziness. For example, it's easy to spend several hours browsing YouTube videos, and it's trivially easy to do research projects nowadays. I remember doing one research project back when I was 11 that involved making a map listing the capitals, exports, imports, and religion of every country in the world. Researching that today would take a couple hours. Back then, I ended up spending every afternoon in the library for two weeks.
On the other hand, your point that a library may have outdated details is absolutely correct, and that was especially true when I was doing my research project. It was a few years after the collapse of the Soviet Union, and a lot of the books I came across had countries that no longer existed. So having technology helps a lot, but I do worry about how much more time people seem to waste these days.
Regarding your essay, there are a few things that I think could really help it shine. First, you need a thesis statement: something in your introductory paragraph that briefly outlines what you're going to write about. Just a sentence or two along the lines of, "Technology helps by bringing families together, increasing business productivity, and by helping students."
Also, try to avoid words like "thus," "therefore," and "hence." They're not bad words to use whatsoever, but you have the same habit I once did of using those three words over and over to string sentences together. They're also usually not necessary.
Overall, though, I think you did a good job with outlining how useful technology is and how it ultimately helps society.
You said exactly my thoughts. My reviews have mostly been about the writing itself, but you hit my personal thoughts on the head.