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Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Well this was a fun story. I really love the plot for this one, the ending was golden and the first bit had a very nice and appropriate amount of silly humor that I love.
Anyway let's get right to it,
“What is that?” Sally asked, leaning over the fence. Ray frowned at her, but he did the same. Though he did try to get a closer look, he managed to stop himself from leaping over it completely, like Sally did. Well, she didn’t actually leap over it. More like she lost her balance and ended up face-first in the dirt and who knows what else. Her yelp could have woken up whoever was staying in the farmhouse, but thankfully, it didn't.
Uhh...well that's an interesting place to start. Definitely gets your attention with what seems like a bit of a silly goof almost there.
“I can see that, Ray. But it has whiskers, if you look close enough. And see that? Those are stripes. A cow don’t got stripes. It got spots, but no stripes. I grew up on a farm just like this one, I can tell. I’ve seen completely white cows, completely brown cows, and brown cows with white spots and every color spots, but no striped cows.”
With the craziness going on these days I would honestly not be surprised by a cow with stripes. I mean they do have glow in the dark cats.
“Why are you looking at me? You’re the smart one, I’m the pretty one, and Kara is the pain in the neck one.” She flipped her long brown hair over her shoulder and grinned cheekily at Ray.
Ha ha...I love that line.
It purred. Out of the blue, the sound erupted from the back of its throat as it rubbed itself against the fence. Spying a bird out of the corner of its eye, it immediately forgot about the makeshift backscratcher and instead tried to grab it. The fact that it had hooves didn’t seem to bother the… thing at all.
Whoa okay that...was very surprisingly cat like...well once again though...its not too terribly surprising considering the crazy experiments they run but it is in fact a little bit on the extra crazy side.
“I know bovine is a cow because Dad told me it was. Say, a cat is a canine, right?”
“It’s feline, Sally. Canine is dogs.”
“Oh, right. So, we call it a fevine? Or a boline? I think fevine sounds better, what about you?”
This is a conversation I didn't know I needed to hear.
“Yes, but a cat has an average life span of twenty five years. A cow has the average life span of twenty two years. Do the math.” His eyes were cold. “It would already be thirty or forty years old in human years. It won’t last.”
Okay wait a minute...human years are different to cow years...how exactly does that whole thing work. Am I just dumb or what's going on here?
Sally’s eyes widened. As if sensing the coming disaster, the fevine let out a cross between a moo and a screech, rocketing away from the pair. Sally quickly switched her focus to the fevine, mouth hanging open. “Hey! Wait, fevine! Ray says he’s sorry! Hey, come back!”
So its been around for thirty or forty years and no one's given it a name. Uhh...what??
With those words, she sprung up and dashed after it, years of being on the track team finally paying off. Ray just stared after her. Finally tearing his eyes away from the hysteric Sally, he shook his head. “I never said that.”
Okay that part is genuinely hilarious right there.
By this point, Sally had cornered the cowering fevine, and was talking to it, attempting to soothe it. “Ssh, I ain’t gonna hurt you. Ray isn’t going to either, even if he does look scary. Now, come with me.” The fevine let out a whine and butted his head on Sally’s palm. She laughed and started stroking his smooth fur.
Bonus points for cute animal moment.
“That’s nice. Now, come on. Let’s go.” Gently leading the fevine to the gate, she laughed as it attempted to dance around her. It tripped over a rock and was sent stumbling to the ground. Quickly recovering itself, it seemed to laugh as well and try again. It was jittery, but managed to keep up with Sally’s paces.
Okay so now its clumsy...then how exactly did it take off like that earlier? Slight bit of continuity issues right there.
“Told me what?” she asked, reaching the gate. The fevine was licking her hand. Its rough tongue tickled. It felt like she was rubbing her hand across Velcro straps.
Yup that's definitely how a cow tongue feels...do not ask me how I know that.
“It won’t last.” Sally stopped dead, her eyes strangely blank. It didn’t fit her. She was always cheerful, always the joker. Now, she was almost a clone of Ray. It was unnerving for said boy, to say the least. He could count on one hand how many times he had seen Sally like this.
Now, the grand total was one.
Well that took a turn that I was not expecting it to be taking.
“I already know that!” she suddenly exploded. “You already told me that! I know that they don’t live as long as humans! I am not some stupid little girl! I’m older than you are, Ray!” She paused for a while, probably to catch her breath. Her face was tinged red, something that only happened if she was laughing really hard. Not anymore. “And I’m better than you. At least I’m not a jerk. I have had it with you.” She took a deep, ragged breath.
Okay...someone's very, very pissed off right there.
“I regret ever falling in love with you.”
Yup drama level over 9000.
Behind the fence, the fevine purred, blissfully unaware of what it had caused. Ray was envious of it.
Not just for that fact, but also that Sally actually came back for it. When he visited again the next day, the fevine was gone.
Well that was a fun ending there...definitely fitting right there considering how morbid Ray was being.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall it was a pretty fun little story to read and I enjoyed it quite a bit. There were a few noticeable error mostly very nitpicky things but putting that aside the story it itself was very much enjoyable and I love the ending especially.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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