The Rainbow

(I had to review one of your poems. You are one of my favorite writers on here.)

Hi! Happy Review Day! My name is Ari and I will be reviewing your poem today.


Does each color actually have these significant meanings to you? Because from a reader's point of view, it seems like you just added random words to random colors. If that's the case, then that makes for very sloppy work.

However, as i can see from below, this is your first work. You will get better in time. Keep writing! You're awesome. Jesus loves you!

Heya, you're first work! Awesome and you have 5 reviews! Mega awesome! You are very deep in this poem, and its wonderful.

I am just confused about a few things:

How does orange relate to technology?

How is violet hopeless? Maybe it's because it has a dark shade to it, but it doesn't feel 'hopeless to me.

Also, "the rainbow, for us." Compared to the majority of the poem, it seems bland. It just doesn't give us the sense of beauty you gave the colors. I would suggest making it more descriptive or really play with the words. Make it effective so we really remember he last line.


Great job on this poem! Keep writing more poems and stories! You're creative and you should never give up!

Woah, my first piece gets featured?!

Thank you all!! <3

woah this is a good poem.
good job pal

Hey there WanderlustStardust,
Myjaspercat here to leave you a review.

First off welcome to YWS!!

Red, the color of roses;
of love and rage under autumn leaves-
Orange, for technology, Quick question, how do you come to associate orange with technology?
of fire and neon and honesty's lies I like the idea of "honesty's lies" it's different and very real. Good job.
Yellow, for hopeful days,
of smiles and sunsets and Shelter's song. Quick caveat: you have the first three colors all combined into one sentence but after, you have each color create their own sentence. I feel like it would be better for the flow of the piece if you also split the first three colors into their own sentences as well.
Green, the color of summer-
of grass and go and wonderful words.
Blue, of the sea,
of the sky, being sad, and Winter's reflection.
Violet, for the inbetween, In-between needs either a hyphen or a space.
of those kids and "hopeless" and learning to fly. I'm a little confused about the description of violet.
Purple, for justice,
of royalty and whispers and the stars in the sky.
The rainbow, for us. So far I have really loved this poem, but the ending just kind of drags it down for me. I don't know what it is exactly but it really breaks that flow that you had going on. I would suggest maybe playing around with the wording of it a bit.

Listen, i dont know how old you are but nevertheless, do not stop writing. You have so much potential you dont even realize it yet. You understand the world around you and its so astonishing that you feel this deeply at your age. Feeling these emotions can take a tole on you..be careful and stay wise

Helllllllllllllo! Welcome to YWS, I'm Angel or Ryan whichever you prefer to call me. This is a really cool topic to see with poetry, I mean I never would have thought of focusing on colors. I believe you were trying to say something with this? I mean I don't see any grammatical or spelling errors, so I might as well start talking about how frickin deep this is. Some of these I never would have thought of for that particular color, like orange and technology. I'm not going to pretend I understand the whole thing, but poetry is usually very personal, so I know it has a really important meaning. I think I'm just rambling now. Sorry. But this says a lot (even if I don't exactly understand a lot of it) and I hope you keep writing!