ooga booga shunga
Bunga duuga?
SOOG
Boga shoga bunga
Kachunga.
Boga?!
Ungo!
Booga pooga dunga gunga…
Note: II cant think of what to write :(
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
137,435 Literary Works • 672,020 Reviews
Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the malevolent S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - This is a romantic and dramatic short story about someone who is desperate for love, but cannot find it and is now all alone, with nobody to turn to, nobody to trust, nobody who will understand…
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - No recommendations, this is absolutely beautiful.
Chocolate Bar - I love the line “Boga shoga bunga” because it really moves me to tears, it’s just so emotional. Another part of the story I liked was SOOG, because it being in all caps for emphasis brings about a sense of a broken heart, something that I have not felt in many years. You have moved me in ways I didn’t think was possible with a short story and now I think that you are by far the greatest writer of our times.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a very lovely short story! If you ever think of writing a real story, maybe do something that you know, something that you feel comfortable with, something that you enjoy, and start from there. It doesn’t have to be perfect, just do it from your heart, what you really want to write. I’ll check it out if you ever write anything else. Nothing is perfect, after all. This was a funny read and so I wish you…
A beautiful day/night! ^v^
Heya! Hope here with a review!
So i really like the creativity of this poem. You can really feel the emoiton of the POV character. The start of the poem, he is happy, but then in the line 'bunga buuga?' he very clearly realizes the truth of the matter. Then, with the following line 'SOOG' you can really feel the utter heartwrenchingness. By the time you get to 'kachunga' you already are super attached to the character, and you want his begging to be heard. When he screams for the universe to hear him, and when it refuses to awnser... its a very deep poem.
I feel this on many levels.
So creative xD