I would like to think that we're all alive here.
That maybe these cruel blurbs of sanity are
real. But I've come to the realization that nothing exists besides
me.
Not my parents. Nor my friends. Nor my lovers.
Nothing. Absolutely nothing exists in this destructive universe besides me
and the person that is destined to kill me.
Eventually.
But it gets worse!
For tomorrow in Hell they will be laughing...
Not at themselves or their pain.
Every last one of those scoundrels will be laughing at you and
me.
Those beasts, those savages!
Has no one taught them manners?
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Always important to have good manners. Even in Hell. Sigh....... I wonder where I'll be going.
I'm pretty sure I pictured school throughout the whole time reading this.
With the people out to get me (my friggin teachers are psycho), the people laughing at me (everyone, duh), and then there was, "But I've come to the realization that nothing exists besides me."
That kind of reminded me that I'm a loner and THANKS FOR REMINDING ME BUTT FACE
okay
But then I read, "For tomorrow in Hell they will be laughing..."
and I realized, "KAYLEE THERE'S NO SCHOOL TOMORROW, HAHAA"
and I automatically loved you for reminding me of SOMETHING GOOD
So, overall, I think you did a pretty good job, dude!
SOMEBODY TEACH THESE SAVAGES MANNERS, FOR GODSAKE
lel peace out yo
~Shiny
Hellooo
Hassan here with a review.
So what I think about this poem is that the people "destined to kill me" is you as well. The narrator him/herself is the one responsible for their own destruction and the people laughing know that.
To me this brings the picture of a horrible school day to mind, with random unknown people laughing at me.
And I just realised that my review makes no sense at all.
._.
Sorry... .-.
I'm still half asleep soo...
Anyways, this was a good poem. I found no problems in flow or any typos etc.
Rating : 8/10
Hassan
Haha! It's okay :3
And your review does make sense.
"The narrator him/herself is the one responsible for their own destruction and the people laughing know that."
You recognized my intention! %u2665