Let it slip through your fingers.
Let it fall and crash to the ground.
The glass is already shattered,
Broken beyond repair.
Why don’t you throw a match in?
Watch the flames illuminate the darkness,
Fueled by our pure love.
The fire will burn through our hearts,
And leave behind only ashes of life,
To be blown away
By the strong wind of His breath
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The poem was just fine. I think how you approached it in conjunction with the title, I kind of expected that. Especially the parts with the glass breaking and the flames. I did not like the first two lines at all. I feel they are just plain and do not flow well with the rest of the poem. However, I felt the depth and emotion. Even though it's "one of those poems" it is still quite well written.
Keep writing
I really like this! One of the best poems I've read recently. I don't have anything to really critique on it. Other than just throwing it out there that the beginning of every line does not need to be capitalized if it is part of the same sentence of the previous line. Really great writing.
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