And She Shall Rise

by thetaostedwriter

Published November 25, 2024

12+ Violence

In Short Stories Written After Midnight

     Memories are valuable. Yet, what do you do without them? No knowledge what-so-ever. Who will teach you? Who will stay?

     The day had fallen and it was dark out. Just dark enough for her skin to camouflage her to the edges of the shadows. She was skimpy, hungry and parched. Her hands were calloused from the work she'd done, but she was sick. She didn't feel well and she didn't understand why. She knew that her mother had been through the same, but her mother has long since disappeared.

     She wandered through the streets, arms squeezed tight in front of her. The distant sound of gunfire was muffled, a constant reminder that the ringing in her ears won't ever stop. She wasn't born like this. She knows she wasn't. At least that's something.

     Little dots of white dance in her vision, making her wonder if this is death in its prime. Still, she keeps moving forward. Even as it gets harder and harder to breathe, she keeps moving forward. She wanders into a broken house, unaware of the bags that sit inside. She stumbles… she falls.

     The soft thud of her body hitting the ground rings in her ears. She winces. 'How much longer,' she thinks to herself, 'must I… keep…' She doesn't dare finish that thought. She's miserable and desperate, but in her state, it's near impossible to call for help. She wants to close her eyes, yet the fear of no longer waking up scares her, so she refuses to.

     Until…

          it gets…

               too loud.

     The gunfire had traveled, sounding closer to the tiny broken hut than before, but she has no strength to move. She has no motivation. 'What's the point,' her thoughts say. 'Just let them take me.' She's tired of trying. Of moving. Of making an effort. She's… nothing.

     Minutes passed when a strange smoke had started to flood the hut, but unlike normal smoke, this sunk to the ground. It didn't rise. Still, she didn't move. When the door burst open, she didn't move, but she flinched when a set of large hands turned her over and yanked her up. They were unfamiliar, but she didn't have much of a choice.

     She catches a glimpse of the person's face, realizing it's a man. He looks young, but the scars and bruises make him look old. He's talking, yelling even, but she can't hear him. She shifts, her hands going to cover her ears, trying to muffle the sound of the ringing. It only gets louder. What is she to do? How does she fix this?

     It's difficult to breathe and all she can do is wheeze softly. The man looks at her when he makes it outside. He finds cover behind a tree, gently laying her down over his lap as he sits. One of his arms holds her behind the shoulders, giving her support. His other searches in his pockets and pouches. She closes her eyes.

     Everything is too much, but the feeling of the cold glass pressing against her lips is soothing. His hand squeezing her arm isn't. Hesitantly, she parts her lips, letting the man pour the liquid down her throat. She winced and squirmed. It burns. It shouldn't burn. 'Why does it burn?'

     The man holds her still as he keeps the liquid going, ensuring that she swallows by pressing the hollow of her neck gently. The ringing in her ears is painful now and her head just hurts. She wants it to stop…

     Then it does.

     Everything goes quiet. The ringing comes to a stop, the pain comes to an end. It stays like this for a while. She doesn't focus on how long it lasts, just that it's peaceful. Soon enough, she works the courage to force her eyes open. At first, the bright light was blinding and she wanted to close her eyes again.

     Something warm touches her hand and a deep voice speaks. The voice is gruff yet soft. Quiet. "Hey there, kiddo…" The owner of the voice says.

     She stirs, searching for the voice. The warm thing tightens, and she realizes it's a hand gripping hers.

     "Relax. You're stressed enough." The voice says again.

     She turns her head to face the voice and she opens her eyes again. She see's that she's facing the same man who had taken her. He has a soft smile and she can see his face clearly now. She see's his skin is light but his hair is dark. Stubble is scattered on his chin, scars all over the place.

     "Who are.." She tries to speak, but it doesn't really work. Her throat is dry and sore. He smiles.

     "Oliver, kid, but call me Oli." He says. He reaches over grabbing a small cup of water, putting it to her lips. "What were you doing out in the front anyways, kid?"

     She takes a few sips before refusing anymore. She doesn't know the reason why. She was just there. That's all she really knows. So, she doesn't respond. She looks around, avoiding eye contact. She stays quiet before deciding to avoid the topic altogether and ask something else.

     "Who am I?.."

     Oli remains quiet. He doesn't know how to answer that. How are you supposed to tell a kid who they are? You can't. So, he smiles. He takes her hand, raising it up. His voice is soft and simple, his hands warm but rough.

     "Hope. You are Hope."

                                                 "And I'm going to teach you how to live."

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WilliamPaige wrote a review Review · Mar 12, 2025

Okay, so I'm coming to this a bit late. I have yet to read your other works, which I assume provides context to this lovely piece of literary art.

As for the review: this is a very well written story/excerpt. The use of the shapes and spacing of the words and overall flow is something of poetry, by far one of my personal favorites to be found in literature and used to little. That being said I do have a few questions, and while I may be partially at fault for not doing my due diligence, I am still curious. What is the liquid of drink that Oli offers to her? Why does the smoke behave so oddly?

Despite a few well intended questions, I love the way you introduce Hope I'm such a emotionally stirring way. By showing her in a place of such vulnerability pushing through pain and illness you immediately tell the reader that she is a force to reckoned with. Even as she lies sick and festering she refuses to give up, she refuses to close her eyes until she knows she has a chance. Absolutely brilliant! A stunning introduction to a character I have high hopes for.

And with my last mention, I would like to highlight a sentence that specifically stood out to me in my read through.

" Little dots of white dance in her vision, making her wonder if this is death in its prime."

The imagery is magnificent, drawing the reader in, setting them on the edge of their seat while also communicating the painful circumstances our narrator is going through. While this chapter is full of greatness, this specific sentence stood out to me as the best example of the lovely blend between emotion and imagery you were able to capture.

Anyway, I hope this review was of use and not just me gawking at your ability. Take whatever you find useful. And I will seek works from you again!

I highly appreciate this! You taking your time to read my story, even if it's a tad old means a lot to me. While yes, Hope's character is meant to be an absolute storm, to many's surprise, Oli actually raises her to be soft and shy. The formula he gave her was honestly something I tried to think logically about. Between a small mix of morphine and other medical combinations, it was a small antidote created to stop the smoke from harming her. The smoke is actually a chemical gas which the enemy team used to kill off the side Hope is on. It's actually the same gas used on my character Carmon and her squad, which is where it was first discovered. I figured this was a good time to show that the gas wasn't just used on military personnel, but everyone that the enemy deemed "violent".

I highly appreciate the comments you made and how you enjoyed my writing style, it truly means a lot! This little piece of work is a background to one of the many characters used to create the Delta Force, a unit in my little world. There are many other characters, each story going into their thoughts and memories. This one and Keeping Distance are probably some of my favorites that I've written. I'd recommend Keeping Distance, as it is a short story that won me 1st place in a National competetion! It goes into depth about one of the main characters, Carmon and I think you'd enjoy it! It's around the same length as this one, but it's still a sweet piece!

Thank you so much for reading!
~Taost <3

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Dec 9, 2024

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the mutated S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - A young woman (or perhaps a young girl), is trying to survive in war, but holding onto life is getting harder and harder. Just when she thinks she can’t do it anymore, a mysterious scarred man comes to her aid and gives her water…or something…to drink. When she wakes up, the man introduces himself as Oliver, but she can call him Oli. She doesn’t remember her own name, so Oliver decides to call her…Hope, for the hope that she brings.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, then you may.

Chocolate Bar - I love how you didn’t say her name throughout the entirety of the story, as it leaves me to wonder who she is, then right at the end…Oliver calls her Hope because she has the hope to be alive, to live through the rough, harsh war. I also love the way you describe Oliver as this man who may be a bit intimidating to look at it, but deep down, he has a heart of gold, he’s like…he’s like, fatherly to her. It’s so endearing! This whole chapter started off despairing but ended on a hopeful note!

Closing Graham Cracker - Whoever is Hope? Could she be another survivor of the bomb that Carmon escaped from? Is she someone entirely different? Whoever she is, she will thrive on, with the help of Oliver to guide her. I have all of my faith in Hope, for war does not always mean an end, but a chance to be reborn as someone stronger than before.

I wish you a delightful day/night! ^v^

Thank you for the review!
Hope's character was a quick design. I'll add a little spoil, since I don't delve deep into her.

In this short story, Hope was lost, sick and unsure. Oliver, yes, is a father figure to Hope, and he does in fact adopt her, although his intention isn't exactly what you may think. Yes, he has a heart of gold. More details on that to come.

Hope's name, as you mentioned, is a sign of hope for her life, but also a trigger of hope on the war itself. She is raised to be one of the best combat medics her squadron will have. Hence, the hope to live. Oliver and Hope's relationship does grow, despite how dark Oliver's intentions may have been.

I do have some editing to do. Reading back I see I didn't specify where the feeling of glass came from, and that confused even me as the writer of this, but I will say, Hope is around the kid. Most of the characters used in this series were also children at the time. Not to say their parents weren't responsible.

I thank you again for reading, more is to come! Any ideas for future topics or things that need to be dug deeper are appreciated. I'll write away! <3
~Taost

Ooh okay! Now that you say Oliver has dark intentions%u2026oh shiz. Well, I guess there%u2019s more to this story than meets the eye.

Very true. It will be mentioned when I write more about Hope, but, in all honesty, it's not really Oliver's fault, it's mainly HQ.

The horrors of HQ%u2026

thetaostedwriter commented Comment · Nov 26, 2024

Been wayyy too long since I introduced a male character lol-



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