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Hey Euphoria!
First of all, I have to say that this poem has a really intriguing title. As someone who used to be completely obsessed with zodiac signs and stuff, I was drawn to this like a moth to a flame.
This poem is really great, and I think you've done a great job describing a toxic relationship. I especially liked the parts where you say "You are greed at it's finest." I think that line perfectly describes how fire and this person devours everything, how they keep taking and never give back. The line "Sympathy is not in your dictionary" also describes them really well.
I love the last stanza. I feel like it aptly describes the toxic relationship you have with this person, and sums up the poem.
On the whole this was a neat, error-free poem. Can't wait to read more of your work.
Keep writing.
Hey there, Euphoria! My name's Vilnius, and I'll be reviewing your poem today! c:
Personally, this poem hit a little close to home cause I live with two people that are as different as they can possibly be. ;-;
I like your use of water and fire as a couple in a toxic relationship. I think that it's a really unique and demonstrates in an extremely awesome way how one individual can take advantage of another. Your use of fire to symbolize greed and toxicity shows skillful understanding of human nature and the elements. It also shows your comprehension of what it is like to be in a toxic relationship with someone and how it makes a person dealing with a toxic spouse/significant other feel.
Have a nice {[*insert time of day here*]}!!!
Thank you so much! This was super hard to write, and believe it or not, by the second stanza I was about ready to just give up on the poem. I stopped for about three months.
Buuuuut, I had a recent experience and continued it with no hesitation. I can definitely see how this can be relatable for others-- whether it's a spouse or family member, so I'm glad you could relate to it!
Dang.
I love the description of you and the water, it hits a truth that isn’t easily expressed—because words of lesser loft cannot do them justice.
I love the ‘can you tell how I’m feeling’, then the ‘can you tell me how you’re feeling’.
Emotion at its finest.
I appreciate it, thank you!