"I have a washing machine inside of my stomach" i love the way that you made
this sound, while also being 100 percent relatable.
"My face got ignited
It’s burning my skin away"
I love the way I can relate to this also, it almost makes me think of blushing and red, and it just goes perfectly with the prose.
"Voice lost its purpose
Words don’t make any sense
My mind?"
I also think it's clever that while this is happening you also illustrated your confusing to what was happening. You're getting flabbergasted what's going on?
I also think it's brilliant that you showed attraction, even though it's considered positive, to be painful sometimes and overwhelming.
GREAT JOB
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