(For those who are in grief)
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I know that my grief runs deep,
It acts like a sword that pierces my heart,
Like fire that burns out a forest,
I know, because it hurts.
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Breath after breath,
It doesn't go away.
Day after day,
It still hurts.
Tear after tear,
It breaks inside.
Tear after tear,
It is not done yet.
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When will it stop?
Time, they say,
Heals everything.
I do hope so.
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I believe that
Where my tears dropped,
Flowers will grow,
And it will bloom.
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I believe that every grief will end,
And I want to say this:
"I believe that your tears will become flowers."
Flowers for tears.
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I want your well-being,
I want your tears to become flowers.
Do not lose hope.
I believe in you.
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Hello, Sylvanus! Valkyria here leaving a review for you!
This is a short poem, but there's so much emotion packed into it. The prose is simple and straightforward, but the metaphors and similes are so harsh. I think it works in this poem's benefit. Grief can be experienced in many different ways; it is such a complex emotion. The similes are beautiful, and the sword and fire fit so well. And I love the analogy of tears becoming flowers. It sends a nice message of beauty and hope. The pacing of the poem also feels natural. It starts out sad, but it ends in an inspirational way.
Well done on your work! I enjoyed reading it!
Thank you for your review, Valkyria, I really appreciate it.
Hey, it's Serrurie, here to review. This is honestly really beautiful, so there isn't a lot to say. But I'll try my best.
The Good Stuff
-You packed a lot of emotion into a pretty short poem. I could really feel the pain, and it honestly felt like it came out of one of those prose books.
-The words 'flowers for tears' feel like a hidden sort of analogy. When I read it, it made me think of how after the pain, you'll grow from it. And that's beautiful to think about.
-I really love the ending. It's great to see supportive poetry like this.
Room For Improvement
- Honestly, I think you did great. I see nothing you could improve on. (I'm not a big poetry fan most of the time, but I really enjoyed this!)
-This was really beautiful and I can't wait to read what else you come up with. Thanks for this poem
Serrurie
Thank you for your review and comment, I really appreciate it