The first four lines really stick out to me, especially the "I hate myself, I love my knife". That was very well done. It's extremely dark, but like the others had said, relatable. However, one part that strikes me is the "Problems, I have problems, I have lots and lots, And lots and lots of problems" I think the 'and' part in the beginning of the fourth line is a bit unnecessary. So instead it could be "I have lots and lots, lots and lots of problems". Just a thought
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