Young Writers Society

Hi there! Just wanted to leave some comments on your lyrics which i think are great! This would really make for a great song and the whole time i was reading it I was singing a little tune to go with it as well haha! Just wanted to say that this was really well done and I am impressed with your song you have created and how much it means to people who can relate to those types of things written. I hope you continue to write lyrics and share them on here for people (like myself) to read and enjoy! Cannot wait to read more or maybe hear some of this with music one day!:)
Kenz

Hi Lylas!

I really enjoy reading lyrics. Question: do you have a tune for these lyrics? You repeat some words in here a lot. It looks a little strange to me right now, but I know that sometimes it does sound better when set to music.

I read the title, and the beginning was not at all what I expected. Generally, tired is calm, not at all anxious or worried. I was curious why you would start out with being tired in a poem that is about calming down.

As I read on, it got darker. I certainly wasn't expecting what I got! That's a good thing too. It seemed to get more and more frantic as it went along, and I imagined a racing tempo like a heartbeat.

By the end of the night
I just want death
It’s hard to cope
When life’s a bore
I’m crying again
You’re making me sore

Hello~!! This is Blackie here to review you <3

As a person who suffers from panic attacks every once in a while, I can only understand too well the meaning behind your words.

I imagined this being sung to a hard rocky-screamo beat, but it's a trifle repetitive and kind of gives a pop vibe. There is also no visible chorus in your words.

How any song should go is basically

Verse
Chorus

Verse 2
Verse 3
Longer chorus

Repeat.

Anyways, I really liked the song lyrics, regardless of the beat and whatnot. Keep writing, and very good job! <3

Love~!
Blackie <3