The Doctor looked up at his sonic screwdriver hanging on the end of a rope on the ceiling of the Timelord's spaceship. They had returned, and captured The Doctor, and what was worse, the doctor had no companion. The leader had shot Donna Noble right then and there, and The Doctor was crying with pain. His coat felt empty without his screwdriver, and he felt empty without Donna.
"Doctor, you shall beg for mercy."
"Never." He replied.
A loud whistling noise came from behind the leader of the Timelord's.
It got louder and louder, The Doctor stood up with his eyes the size of golfballs. He started smiling and laughing.
My TARDIS.
He ran to it and leaped inside. Donna was sitting their on a seat.
"How did you-?" He stumbled.
"I've got a trick or two up my sleeve as well spaceman."
The Doctor smiled and ran towards his screen, on it was the leader.
"All those things I did for you. Well now there's one thing you can do for me...BUGGER OFF!"
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I love this story so much! My favorite lines are "His coat felt empty without his screwdriver, and he felt empty without Donna." <3 Brilliant. Poor Doctor without his sonic screwdriver!
I would like some more suspense, though. I mean, this is absolutely great, but I would like the ending to be a little more surprising. Like, "OMG, is that Donna?! How is that Donna?! You said she was SHOT, how did this HAPPEN?" etc. etc. (It would make the story a little deeper, too.)
And some descriptions, like of the spaceship, the Timelords, and how it sounded to the Doctor when people talked. Again, it would just make the story even more interesting.
Anyway, write on, human! This is, again, absolutely awesome. Do some more!
~curiosity (killed the) cat
i think you should make whats going on a little more clear, you need to give a lot more details
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I really like the Doctor and Doctor Who, I do think that you can give a little bit more detail into where they are and why they're there (i really shouldn't say that on the count of I do the exact same thing most of the time
But overall I think you did a real great job writing this.
Keep on Writing (especially if it's about the Doctor!)