i
have cut ties, our tangled red ribbon snipped, and now
i am
left with the loose ends of us
that
i was always cautioned i would have and never believed i would get.
(if
i was to listen to every warning i was told
i'd
have taken out the scissors sooner.
if i
wanted to hear of my own destructiveness
i'd
have let my hands do the talking.
i
was always more honest about that than you.)
i'm
taking the longer thread of two for myself
so
it can lead me out of this labyrinth of you.
darling, was i lost because you left me stranded
somewhere
or
because i went there looking for you and found nothing?
someday
there will be two types of ash under my nails:
one
from a memory left to burn at a pyre of my own making,
one
from the promised haven that my compass needle always led me away from
(and
this was the only warning i should have heeded).
the
foundations and pillars you built from your words into a false home
can
be torn down as soon as their muse wills it.
i
will not shed tears over the matches i light to put them out for you.
there
is a certain power
to
standing in the ruins of a place
you've
always wanted to see fall,
and
saying you were strong, but so am i.
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That final stanza!! - slightly gives me Samson-vibes (from the Old Testament Story) very powerful poem - also I thought your use of parenthesis in here was perfectly done - adds kind of a more intense secondary voice without being distracting to what's being said.
Also these two lines are absolute dynamite:
This was a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
~ alliyah
Hey, SilverNight, Pineapple here for a little review!
First and foremost, I absolutely loved reading this poem. You highlighted the sadness and later joy of getting out of toxic relationship. The poem is relatable too many people who were able to get out of this sort of relationship.
In the line "that I was always cautioned I would have and never believed I would get". I liked this line because sometimes when we are warned of a person, love literally blinds us. We block out all the flaws of a person when we love them that much. And that can leave us in pain. At the end of the poem, the narrator has a sort of revelation. They realize that they can find a way to push through their hurt. "You were strong, but so am I" is a beautiful line.
In all, great job! You obviously put a lot of effort into this <3
Signed,
Pineapple
This sounds like someone who has come out of a toxic relationship victoriously.Like they have decided to leave it for good and never ever come back to that.Rising from the ashes of a love that never ever (not in a million years) was.And in the end it is you and not the other person who has the power.I hope that you will have an amazing and fantastic day and night.