Ah, but maybe because others repeated themselves for the likes of us, during a time when we would rather not hear of it.
Author's Note: Hey! Another poem, heh heh. This was inspired by OrionRising. Funny story, actually. He was in the chat, and kept making the same face. After the second or third time, he says "Why am I repeating myself?" And then, of course, I randomly got the inspiration for this. I free wrote it in-chat, actually. Because I'm strange like that. Anyways, here you are.
"Why am I repeating myself? In a world left in the gray...
A land choosing to hear not, and voices fade away.
Who am I to cry out, my words upon deaf ears?
Why am I repeating myself? It seems that no one cares..."
Ah, but maybe because others repeated themselves for the likes of us, during a time when we would rather not hear of it.
Hey Shea. Me here with a review, Hopefully it will help.
Okay well I was there for a bit but I left early so I can write in ignorance of what happened.
Okay maybe this was a typo or not but that who Seems like it is supposed to be How or maybe Who am I to cry out too.
Overall Very nice I like it though I am not sure why maybe because it is original maybe because it is better than anything I can write, though I think that if you tried you could write and epic poem, even better than this, I also like hoe you ex-plane how you were inspired to write it.
If you have anything else you wan't me to read and give you my opinion on then just post it on my wall...
~Jonathan~
This is pretty deep! Haha, I hope you let OrionRising know he inspired you to write this poem. I'd love to know the meaning behind this poem, since it strangely makes me visualize an apocalyptic world. A world where life is void. A world where you're truly alone for the first time.
I like this.
You cover a very simple, yet interesting topic, and keep it simple. I like that you haven't blown it out of proportions with some big and over zealous explanation.
"Why am I repeating myself? In a world left in the grey...
Who am I to cry out, my words upon deaf ears?
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