Young Writers Society

I like this poem, it doesn't make me feel like I am completely lost in a sea of literary imagery. That being said, the imagery is very, very good. I am not one to normally read poems, partly because I can't really understand it all the time, but this was really good. Thanks for the good read. Peace out!

OH. wow. this poem is. absolutely stunning.

I am here!! for a lil review

The first stanza is PERFECTLY put together. It gives the same feeling as falling, really. I was not quite sure of where you were going with it until it hit me at the last couple of lines. That was really beautifully done, and it takes a lot of technique to accomplish something like that.

I love the way your poem goes to and fro like a train of thought. The second and third stanzas are perfect for the tone of the poem, and they create this very human effect that is wondering and thinking things over and connecting dots for things many wouldn't think of.

"i am nearer than they know/ and i can see better/ than any of them." I have no words for this portion. It's absolutely beautiful, and it creates such a lovely and dreamlike mood.

The sixth stanza is so beautiful, and it really ties together a lot of the loose ends. Green, like the earth, the only people getting vertigo are those uncomfortable in the sky. This is so creative?? SO incredibly, beautifully creative.

The last stanza is stunning. It's a wonderful, powerful end to a very strong poem. I have one little critique (that may not even be a critique, I;d just like to ask you about it): the last stanza is the first time you use the word 'acrophobia'. It sort of introduces an almost new topic to the poem. If it was followed by another stanza, that would be something different, but the last stanza is mostly to wrap things up and end it on a strong note.

Altogether, a beautiful and masterful poem. I absolutely loved it, and I will definitely be coming back to read it again. Thanks for writing this! You should definitely be proud.

Hello, I am here to review the poem. It is a very interesting one. First you explain the meaning of vertigo, or better said, your feeling about the word. In my mind when I say the word vertigo I imagine some sort of toy spinning for I have many fond memories of childhood toys that did that. On the other hand, one time I was spinning around and shattered some glass that hurt my ear so I gues I am neutral about the word.
Than you make a wide observation about the French origin of the word and how amusing it is that it paints the image of the trees and the ground when you usually feel vertigo on the sky.
I like how you told about having your head in the clouds, I take it that means being a dreamer yet seeing people clearer than they like to believe, like someone having eagle eyes and being able to distinguish between people's personalities. When I was younger I was a dreamer too, I still am a bit. I liked to analyse my fellow classmates but I was shy too.It created a sort of distance...
I also enjoy the fact that though they tell you not to dream you follow your dreams and fly.Then you end the poem similar to how you started it by describing the fear of heights and yet you take control of the situation and don't let fear exist where you feel free , you don't let anything except freedom and happiness define you.I like it that you ended it in an inquisitive yet sorta positive note, and I enjoyed your thoughts. It was a beautiful poem.

hi @Shadeflame

wow this was a nice poem i really liked it and no mistakes and i didn't read any poem with no mistakes well one "Black lives matter "by @potter4life really nice one

Hello there! I’d like to review your wonderful piece of writing. I enjoyed this script quite a lot. It was very relatable and I feel like it kind of describes most writers. We have been known to have our heads in the clouds, always thinking and dreaming things that are more interesting than what is going on around us. Also, you have done an extraordinary job of keeping a steady flow of words. It’s not the least bit choppy, which is no small accomplishment. I only have one critique that isn’t very big. Could you capitalise your “I”s and maybe the letter of the first word in each stanza? I think this would make it easier to read. I hope this review helps! Never let anyone clip your wings!!
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