This is stunning. Absolutely stunning. That first line took my breath away.
I think one of the best things about poetry is how it can my physical things feel unstable ("your body is full of birds"), metaphysical things feel stable ("behind a veil like a patient bride). This poem does both, and it does both beautifully.
The imagery is poignant yet sparse enough that it doesn't feel overwhelming. It's also easy to grasp, yet that doesn't reduce its complexity.
Also I adore how you used rhyme inconsistently to highlight connections between words, brilliant. Have you read John Logan by any chance? He manipulates the conventions of English poetry in a similar way.
Once again, this is exquisitely done. I can't wait to read more of your work! - YellowSweater.
Points: 109
Reviews: 37
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