Misty cities 'neath your feet
stretch and spread like faded blankets.
Shrouded mountains reach to meet
your high and giant bouldered shoulders.
Distant hills of scrub brush shrubs
resemble velvet to the touch.
Lakes, the barely silver slicks
of blinding light. The chill wind licks
through you: you quake.
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Hello! psithurism here with a review, sooo.. let's just get into this.
Basically what I mean is that you described it very well. Good job.
Well, first of all this poem was super fun and unique... (i could say) to read. You had a very strong and well balanced use of imagery, and as I read it, I could really imagine the feeling of it being either read out by a giant... or written by a giant.
Just a few pointers, I guess, is that when writing poetry I guess that you do not have to use captial letters at the beginning of each line, but if you do use it in a few, then you should use it in all of them. Of course, if you make it lower case because it is connected to the line above, then I suggest maybe adding some more punctuation, such as commas? Perhaps...
And the last thing is just that it would be nice not to add the large amounts of spaces, because it can slow you down or be a bit distracting.
Overall, this was again a fun and exciting piece of poetry, well done!
Reminded me of these two scriptures:
As a reader I could not help but wonder how such a large man would find enough oxygen at that high altitude to breathe.
This was quite the interesting read. Being giant would be cool, considering I'm a small person. Hello, I'm FantasyWriter76, or Fantasy76, if you preferred. I'm going to review your poem, so let's get into it!
Now, this poem has an interesting way the world of a giant is described. Giants are quite huge, and cannot really tell humans what is feels like to be one, but this story describes it so well it seems to come out of a giant's mouth! Marvelous!
Good stuff out of the way, you should really arrange this poem into stanzas, that way, it'll be processed and read easier. I'm not sure if you intended it to be this way, but stanzas would be very helpful!
Overall, this was a good poem, though it was hard to read without stanzas, I give this poem a 4 misty cities out of 5. Well done, fellow writer!
-FantasyWriter76
Haha hoi, I just wanted to say that i really enjoyed your poem and how creative it was! :")
The ending was very interesting and it reminded me of energy drinks but yeah, oof. One thing I suggest you get rid of are the spaces because it kind of distracts the reader and it makes the reader read it really slow, as if the ending is very far away, which is cool.. but yeah.
I really look forward to reading more of your work! MuaH