Hi there Quinine! Katja here to review your poem. Please feel free to disregard any and all comments or suggestions I make, should you deem them to be unhelpful. That being said, let's get to the review!
Your poem's strong point is definitely the use of imagery through your wording. I really liked the comparison of the pine needles and prickly branches to kisses and embraces, because it really shows me that the narrator doesn't mind the discomfort that must of us would view that as, and rather embraces it as apart of the beauty of the Pine Tree.
I also really loved the format of the poem, nontraditional and really emphasizes the narrator's carefree nature and makes it light-hearted enough to enjoy without taking the poem too seriously.
My favorite part was when you spelled out awestruck vertically. Very fun way to end the poem!
My only suggestion is that more details could have benefited the readers comprehension of why the narrator admires the pine tree so much/why they are awestruck by it.
Other than that, your poem is wonderful and I enjoyed reading it for sure! i look forward to reading more of your work soon!
Keep writing,
-Katja
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