The Witch Fairy Tale

by Nyl
  • March 3, 2012
  • Poetry
  • Satire · Fantasy
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This is from my blog page. lol. Let me tell you something why i wrote this kind of silly stuffs. my heart was broken, and so was my pride. so, instead of drowning my self into gothic literature, which was my main genre, i started writing satires. and this one is one. and trust me, when i wrote this stuff, i can't help but laugh!

She has curly hair

Like the step mom of Rapunzel

She has a big grin

And her teeth is all green

 

She is your Snow White

Be careful, she’ll bite

She isn’t a vampire

But her teeth looks like wire

 

She need to meet you at midnight

Oh here comes your future wife

Is she Cinderella?

Why does her face looks like a gorilla?

 

Here’s a call for Beauty,

Mister you are Beast, she is Beauty

Oh no let us change the history

Make it “ Beasty and the Beast”

 

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xxFleetingEternity
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xxFleetingEternity commented · Sun Mar 04, 2012 4:43 pm

Hm...well, personally, I don't think it's one of your better works.
Also, in the second stanza, shouldn't it be "look" instead of "looks"?
However, I really do enjoy the end. It put humour into the poem.
You're making me want to move on to satire and write it. :( I should really leave it alone, it's your thing, but who knows? Whatever. Life is unpredictable, no?
Fleet OUT!!

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Pilot
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Pilot wrote a review · Sun Mar 04, 2012 2:27 pm

I like the general idea, but I would change a few things. Here is the poem in my revised way(reworded and fixed a few grammar thingers):

"She has curly hair
Like the stepmom of Rapunzel
She has a big grin
With her teeth all green

She is your Snow White
Be careful, she'll bite
She's not a vampire
But her teeth are like wire

She needs to meet you at midnight
Oh here comes your future wife
Is she Cinderella?
Why does her face look like a gorilla?

Here's a call for Beauty,
Mister you are the Beast, as she is Beauty
Or shall we change the history
Let's make it "Beasty and the Beast""

That's just how I would have written it, but I think you like it your way better.

Overall good job, I like the Disney princesses included in the poem, it makes it unique.

:D



Proud people breed sad sorrows for themselves.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights