Can’t broken love make lost wind play poetry for me
Can’t wind sigh on a wild shoreline for me
Can it breathe its valiant significance
Can it whisper words knotted with emotion
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Or do I seek the voice of an angel from Heaven
Who wears it like a crown and recites it as a song
Whites flapping softly back and forth like a butterfly
As her voice finally reaches me
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Or was it just a scapegoat
From pain
Emotion
Hatred
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Because your gentle words make me cry
And I despise the smell of the ocean dripping down my cheeks
Because it means I’m not strong
Because it means I’m not worthy of you
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And all I want is to love you for your differences
And guide you through your difficulties
Because when you have health problems I feel sick to the stomach
Because when you struggle to get out of bed I can only flop down on the floor
Because when you are tired my eyes sag low and the teacher throws a board marker to awaken me
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Because when you finally take my hand all I want to do is hug you
But I step back instead and wait for your embrace
Because I want you to be comfortable
Because I want you to be happy
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Because I’ll let the wind exhale its fluffy words once more
Because it doesn’t really matter
Because I love you so much
I cry
***
And it finally seems to make sense
That I’m me
And that you’re perfect
In every single way
***
That I want it at your pace
Because if we go too fast then I beg for an angel
And I ask for freedom
As I stare into your flawless eyes
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Because my love for you is so deep it scares me
Because your embrace is so warm
Because I’m still lying I love them and not you
But it doesn’t really matter anymore because I know I love you
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Hey @lehmanf! Trinity here for a short review!
Wow, this is such a good poem. You really packed in some deep emotion into this piece. In every bit, you made it possible to feel the love for the person. The description of the "Flawless eyes" to the feeling in the last lines of
I also like the structure. It is the perfect amount of free-flowing to give the sense of wandering lightness. Same with the title.
I also love the feeling of pain and hoplessness in these lines
The thought of unworthiness tearing at the heart. That was a really powerful and impactful moment.
Anyway, really loved your poem!
Keep writing!
-Trinity
Thank you so much Trinity! I really appreciate your kind words.
I loved reading this poem.I take it that it is about someone who loves another person so much,that they view the person as a flawless entity.They are willing to do anything for the other even if one of those things is letting go.That’s how deep it goes.I hope that you will have an awesome and lovely day and night.
Thank you for giving it read, Vampricorne. I really don%u2019t mind interpretation and I%u2019m happy to see you took the time to try and figure it out. You got it right until the end. It%u2019s actually someone with Autism who doesn%u2019t like being touched etc. and he doesn%u2019t want to make her uncomfortable. A very personal meaning. I just thought I would share the meaning with you just so you will understand better.
Good day,
Lehmanf
Okay,thanks.
I loved reading this poem.I take it that it is about someone who loves another person so much,that they view the person as a flawless entity.They are willing to do anything for the other even if one of those things is letting go.That’s how deep it goes.I hope that you will have an awesome and lovely day and night.