You have memories to look back on today, I take you to less than a decade back, The time of your life, of joyous summer, And to the mellow cold of winters, Used to bring you to the edge of calm, And as high as heaven, until dawn, But now, not more than a plentiful of regrets,
That time never passed, not did it heal,
Scars still exist, and remind you of the pain,
Of wounds that once festooned your existence,
And have now dissolved you in to nothingness,
It's all black and white now, somewhere grey too,
Sometimes you remember, and some you live,
But now, not more than a plentiful of regrets,
You have memories to look back on today,
I bring you back to the present day,
You remembered what you forgot-or you thought so,
Of love that didn't die, of love that didn't age,
Moments you never miss, and life you lived is,
Forever you forget, forever you remain,
But now, not more than a plentiful of regrets,
-Myers
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Hi Myers, I was looking for a poem to review and noticed this didn't have any! So I thought I'd stop by and leave a few thoughts...
why does the poem end in a comma? is this meaning there are plenty of regrets or not plenty?First! On the formatting - > is it intentional that a few of the beginning words bleed over on the right hand side of the screen? I initially assumed they were meant to be sort of asides that added meaning that might be a poem in themself, but had a little trouble quite understanding what that added meaning might be for why they are separated out. Maybe it is showing the separation of people and time with the extra white-space? That would be my best guess for interpretation.
Wanted to mention briefly on the title... "A Plentiful Regrets" - while the phrase "a plenitful" is a common one, I haven't heard it quite in this context, I wonder if "Regrets, a-plenty" might make more sense? Either way it seems like the point is that the speaker is ruminating on all of their regrets that they feel are over-abundant!
There are really some phrasing moments that I think could take a second look in the third stanza especially - I could follow along alright in the first and second stanza, but the third one had some sentences that because a little hard to follow:
Overall the poem seems like a reflection on the combination of memory, time, and regrets, though I don't quite get a full narrative out of it - I'm not sure why the narrator is so pained by their memories as I am not given many details on the subject which makes the poem a little difficult to connect to emotionally or imagine. I think a little more specificity would build out the narrative of the poem and help readers connect to it even more. I've written a little more on this subject about adding specificity to poetry here.
I think a lot of readers can connect to the themes you raise, adding a little more narrative will help that even more! Thank you for sharing your poetry! And hope you are still writing too!
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