Act I, Scene III – Vestige:
The temptress guides me to a small motel outside of the building, which, if I remember, was not there before. But her hand is in mine, and her slender naked body will soon touch mine, so I don’t care for it.
The lady—Erin—takes me to a room labelled ‘1’. She opens the door, revealing a white room. White sheets, white walls, white pillows, even a white carpet. She closes the door and pulls me into her and I taste her, bittersweet and addicting.
She drags me onto the bed, moving across my body with such grace and leaving me with feeling that I could have never imagined. Never have I ever been entangled in such lustful fury with a woman before. She was truly bewitching, and the way she moved made my imagination run wild with the endless possibilities. Such carnal delight.
But just then, Alice’s face flashed through my mind, and I began to hesitate. Erin notices and breathes me in, taking away my human reason and leaving me with feelings of indulgence.
And so, I let myself go. I allowed sweet temptress Erin to take the rest of me.
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