Eos, Chapter 5.1: Back on the Job

by Mea

Published August 25, 2018

12+ Language

In Multiplicity

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A/N: For those just joining us, in this universe, there are 32 parallel realities overlapping each other, and sometimes people fall between those realties for reasons no one really understands. Dameon fell down to the bottom reality 3 years ago to find that this reality has suffered an apocalypse. Now he's a rescue worker who flies all over the former US to bring in other "fallen" and take them back to the one stable country in this reality. Right now, he and his team are on one such mission.

“Five minutes to landing,” June announced over the intercom.

Dameon leaned back in his chair, closing his eyes briefly. Underneath him, the hoverjet shudder into landing mode. This ride had been a long one, three and a half hours of tedium putting them somewhere… southeast? Near the coast, Dameon thought. The reading had come in at five a.m, dragging Dameon and his team out of bed.

Across the tiny cabin, Jade hadn’t put her book down yet, but she was tapping an impatient rhythm on the armrest. He couldn’t help but smile as he watched her frown in concentration, red hair tied in a business-like ponytail that swayed as she shook her head at something.

He still hadn’t made his choice. It was the last day of Isa’s three-day grace period. If he didn’t use the code she had given him before midnight, she would assume her offer was declined. Dameon looked down at his watch. He had long since committed the code to memory. All he had to do was go to his texts and enter it in.

Jade knew nothing about any of it, of course. But Dameon didn’t need to ask her opinion to know what she would say. He closed his eyes and heard her voice.

“Um, yes, accept it! Think of all the inside knowledge you'll have. Think of the good we can do with it.”

Or Dameon could simply wait. Do nothing. Remain a rescue worker. It would be easy. Why take a side at all? He had no trust in the government and no faith in the rebels. Why risk everything for an idealized dream?

God, why couldn’t he be left alone?

Another voice swam into his head, this time a memory of a voice he hadn’t heard in three long years. “It does sound all screwed up, but you can make a difference, Dameon. I believe in you.”

The memory blossomed in his mind, nearly four years ago now, a cluttered lab room, a stick of a boy perched on the edge of the table, bushy afro framing an anxious, eager face.

Sam. Dameon’s chest ached. His true brother, four years younger than Dameon, a genius in physics, left behind when Dameon fell through to Layer 32 three years ago. Technically, it was Sam’s fault Dameon had fallen through — a faulty program released a beam of omicrons at exactly the wrong time — but Dameon had never found the heart to blame his brother.

I wish I could, Sam, Dameon thought. I wish I knew if I wanted to.

The hoverjet touched down with its usual slight jolt. Dameon vaulted up, pushing aside thoughts of Sam and rebelling and everything else. For here and now, he had a mission. He exchanged a sly glance with Jade, their hands going to their sides to check their stunners at exactly the same time. Prep was simple this time — a priority four area wasn’t dangerous at all, and according to his watch the weather was perfectly clear.

Outside, the air hung heavy and thick as a blanket, stiflingly warm compared to Eos. June had set them down in the middle of a lonely stretch of rural road. Thick forest towered close on either side of the road. Once, the forest would have been kept well back from the road, but in the last decades, the wild brush had almost swallowed it whole. It had rained recently, and the disintegrating asphalt was damp.

A few paces down, a break in the trees gave way to a driveway, leading to an old house just visible through the trees. “Whoever it is should be in the house, I’m guessing,” said Jade, consulting her omicron reader.

“Dameon, the scanner says the fallen is with a group of others,” June’s voice said in Dameon’s ear.

“Could they be the exiles?” At Dameon’s side, Jade’s eyes went wide.

“I can’t tell,” June said. “Be careful. Remember, we’re not allowed to fight them.”

“I know that.” I’m not stupid.

Sneak up the driveway, you think?” Jade said, eyeing the forest.

Dameon hesitated. “No, no reason to hide that we’re coming. If it is the exiles, they didn’t try to hurt the last group who saw them. Besides, there aren’t any vehicles here other than ours — they’re supposed to have Jeeps, ATVs, the works.”

He and Jade hurried up the driveway. The ancient house loomed over them, dilapidated and overgrown. Its windows were broken and in places the wood seemed to sag, but it still had a roof and its structure looked sound, putting it ahead of most houses.

The front doors were heavy oak, intricately carved, and they were standing open. Inside, a hallway and a staircase were wreathed in shadow. Distant voices drifted from inside.

Dameon lifted his hand and knocked on the door. “Hello?” he called.

The voices hushed, and for a minute no other sound came.

“Should we go in?” Jade whispered.

Dameon motioned for her to wait — something was moving down the hallway. An old but hardy bearded man stepped out of the shadows and halted on the threshold of the house. He frowned, his arms folded. “Who’s you?”

“We’re from Vitas,” Dameon said.

“Never heard of it,” the man said. “That your gang?”

“No, it’s a country,” Dameon responded in even tones even as he blinked in surprise. These days, it was rare to meet a feral who didn’t know what Vitas was. He supposed that with little other than deep forest around for miles, if there had never been a fallen nearby before — and since this was a low-population area, that was likely — they really would have no way of knowing about Vitas.

“We cover much of what used to be Canada, as well as parts of the former northern US,” Dameon explained.

Now it was the man’s turn to look surprised — and suspicious. “You’re mad,” he said gruffly. “That many people, organized like that? Not since the collapse. You don’t talk like you’re around here, that’s for sure, but then how did you get here? And what in the — “

“Would you like to see our hoverjet?” Jade cut in. “It’s parked in the road outside.”

He glared at the interruption and repeated himself. “And what in the name of God would you want with us, huh?” After a moment’s pause, he added, curious, “A hoverjet?”

“Like I said, we’ll show you if you want,” Jade said. “And what we want is simple, really — “

“Has someone new… arrived here recently?” Dameon asked. “This morning, maybe a little earlier. Confused, didn’t know where they were?”

The man stared at them for a long moment. “Come inside,” he said, stepping back from the door. “We’ve been trying to get some sense out of him.”

“Thank you,” Dameon said, holding out his hand as he crossed the threshold. “I’m Dameon, and this is Jade. If all goes well, we’ll be out of your hair soon enough.”

“Jonathan Cox,” the man nodded, giving Dameon’s hand a firm shake. He led them down the hall. “Showed up this morning, just a few hours ago, rambling about everything suddenly having been abandoned and overgrown. Says one moment he was walking downstairs, everything went black, a second later his house is in ruins and nobody in sight.”

Him and everyone else who had ever fallen through the dimensions, Dameon thought grimly.

“Yeah, that’s the kind of guy we’re looking for,” Jade confirmed.

“He’s in there,” Jonathan gestured through an open door. “Have a seat. I’ll call the others, and you’re going to explain exactly what you want with Mitch.”

Comments & reviews · 3
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Carlito
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Carlito wrote a review Review · Oct 1, 2018

Hello again!!

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I'm all caught up on Eos!! :D

Now I feel like we missed a part. We still haven't really seen what the mission is Isa gave Dameon and what the potential pros and cons are for the mission. I would include maybe one scene before this one where maybe Dameon looks everything over and on his own somewhere so we can see all the cards on the table.

Dameon's comment about wanting to be left alone :) Sure, his family probably gets annoying and I'm sure he wants to be left alone from them. But...he chose to go to the rebel meeting...and he chose to go back...and he chose to meet with Isa. So he can't complain about not being left alone in that respect.

I like that we're seeing more of this world and that there are people that don't live in one of the cities. How interesting! I'm guessing they were never picked up after they fell because they have no understanding of the city? Or is there another city they ran away from? I find it so interesting that there are these nomadic people because both the government side and the rebel side seem to be pretty quick to pick people up, so it's weird that somehow people get missed. Are these people that simply refuse to come with? I want more info :)

Overall, a nice transition. I'll be curious to see how Dameon makes his decision! And as always let me know if you have any questions or if you'd like feedback about something I didn't mention! :D

Mea replied · Oct 1, 2018

Man, you went on a roll! Hm, it concerns me a little that it's not clear that there are lots of people living outside Eos and the rebels, because that's actually the majority of people in the world atm. Eos stopped accepting refugees other than the fallen several years ago, and so everyone else has just had to make do, and the rebels have only been around for about 5 years, so they aren't huge yet. I'll work on making that clearer.

And man, I need to start writing Eos again. It should happen this week! I promise this time! (Hold me to it. :P)

Carlito replied · Oct 1, 2018

I had to get to the pretty pink! :p

Oooooh I had no idea there were lots of people that didn't live in the city or with the rebels. Maybe in the beginning when we see Dameon go on a mission there can be a line about how this is the only way into the city now and refuges have to make do or something.

I'm going to find you in a pad this week and yell until you give me the next segment <3

Mea replied · Oct 1, 2018

Hm, I'm pretty sure I do have a line about that there somewhere, but it clearly needs to be more obvious. :p

And yes, yell at me, cause it probably won't happen otherwise haha

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mellifera
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mellifera wrote a review Review · Sep 26, 2018

Hey Mea! Happy RevMo! :D

I haven't read any previous chapters for this story, so if that interferes with any part of my review, I apologise! I'm going to try to be mostly looking out for things that don't have to do with them. In a similar vein, the summary is helpful, thank you!


Underneath him, the hoverjet shudder into landing mode.


shuddered*?


It seems that Dameon has a moral grey alignment? I'm gathering that from the "no trust in the government no faith in the rebels" part, which is pretty neat? I like characters like that. I'm,, of course, not sure if that's what he is, but if that's the case, that's pretty cool!


!! You've roped me in with Dameon having a brother. I love?? sibling relationships?? But I,, really love brotherly stuff?? I don't know why, and I think I remember talking about it in your LMS thread a few months ago (or maybe I just read it) but either way!! (I don't know if Sam becomes a bigger part of the story lol I just thought I'd throw it in anyway)


I love your descriptions?? They're setting such a lovely, almost haunting description, but it definitely fits in with your apocalyptic setting from the summary.


I think I would have like more clarification as to who all went outside? It's just Jade and Dameon going out, right? June's still in the hoverjet? There's never really a place where you write them getting off the plane, and I would've liked that clarified.


I feel like it's a little contradictory to have Jade offer to show the man the jet, and then Dameon asking about the fallen and the man inviting them in. At least, in such a short amount of time.


"And what we want is simple, really - "

"Has someone new... arrived here recently?" Dameon asked.


Is there a reason he interrupted her? I mean, was he worried about what she might say, or was he just...finishing her sentence? If he was interrupting her for a specific reason, I think I would have liked there to have been some indication that he was unnerved/wary? But again, I don't know why he interrupted her.


I'm definitely curious about what kind of deal Dameon's considering. Was he offered some sort of position with the government? The rebels? Ahh, I know I said I wouldn't comment on things that popped up in previous chapters though. Maybe I'll try to go back and read over them when I have a chance because your story's definitely interesting.


I think that's all I have for you today? Your story's definitely an interesting one. I remember reading it on your LMS thread, like I mentioned, but it's also been quite a while. Still! I hope you keep up the good work, and if you have any questions, let me know!

I hope you're having a wonderful time :D

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Mea replied · Sep 26, 2018

Thanks for the review! Moral gray is probably pretty accurate about Dameon lol, though I'd say it's more of a thing where he really really wants to do the right thing but has no idea what it is, haha. And I'm glad you like the brother relationship - that's going to be one of the primary drivers as the story goes on. :)

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Panikos
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Panikos wrote a review Review · Aug 26, 2018

Hey, Mea! Happy Review Day to you. Good to see a new chapter of this.

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Underneath him, the hoverjet shudder into landing mode.


Tense slippage.

Technically, it was Sam’s fault Dameon had fallen through — a faulty program released a beam of omicrons at exactly the wrong time — but Dameon had never found the heart to blame his brother.

I wish I could, Sam, Dameon thought. I wish I knew if I wanted to.


I know that Dameon's thoughts are supposed to be in response to what he imagined Sam saying, but the intervening paragraph makes that difficult to interpret. When he says 'I wish I could' my immediate interpretation was that he wished he could blame his brother, because of the previous sentence.

Inside, a hallway and a staircase were wreathed in shadow. Distant voices drifted from inside.


Picky point, but maybe eliminate the repetition of 'inside' here? I also wondered whether that first sentence (which is a lovely image anyway) would pack more punch in active voice - e.g 'Inside, shadows wreathed a hallway and a staircase'. Please yourself on that, though, because it just comes down to taste.

“You’re mad,” he said gruffly. “That many people, organized like that? Not since the collapse. You don’t talk like you’re around here, that’s for sure, but then how did you get here? And what in the — “


Something about this dialogue doesn't sit right. I think it's a little too obviously expository.

Overall Thoughts

Nothing too major happened in this chapter, but I still really enjoyed it. Somehow, the setting feels a lot more tangible here than it has at any other point so far - I really get a sense of this heat-hazed, overgrown road and the ramshackle house. It's interesting to learn that there are still pockets of communities outside of Vitas. I suppose it should've been obvious, but I hadn't entertained the possibility much. I loved the small mention about the fallen guy, as well - about how he was walking downstairs and then a moment later his house was in ruins. You throw it in so casually, but somehow that tiny detail makes me fully appreciate how terrifying it must be to fall through the dimensions. That it could change so suddenly, and that you could find yourself so completely alone in a place that should be familiar.

It was interesting to learn a bit about Sam, as well. It makes Dameon's distaste for Samuel and all his dupes clearer, learning that he cared so much for his real brother. It must be awful to be surrounded by people who wear his face but are nothing like him. I'm looking forward to learning more about that particular dynamic.

My one concern for this chapter is I'm not sure how much it's adding. At the moment, I have to presume that something unusual is going to happen in the second half - perhaps Mitch is going to be a crucial character, or somebody Dameon knows from his old life. I have to hope so, because otherwise the chapter is just repeating what we saw in the first, except with lower stakes. I'm not particularly bothered, because there's enough new information in this chapter to keep me interested, but I thought I'd voice the uncertainty at the back of my head.

Regarding Dameon's deliberation over whether to align himself with the rebels, I still don't really feel the inner conflict. I get this passive sense from it, like it doesn't fully matter what he chooses. Maybe it's because, as I said in the last chapter, he doesn't really have anything stopping him outside of general risk. And I'm also not sure what he stands to gain. Still, I talked about this at length in my previous review, so I won't labour the point here.

I think that's all I've got to say. This chapter feels slightly transitional, but despite that I still really enjoyed it, particularly once they landed and started talking to Jonathan. I'm looking forward to finding out who Mitch is and why (I suspect) he's going to be important.

Keep writing! :D
~Pan



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