Hey there, Eli here for a review of your wonderful work!
I did not expect such an outcome. To be honest, I expected you to be telling us about someone, something even maybe, that has gone through a lot and now they are dead or in some kind of a parallel universe where they can finally find the place they needed to be their whole life and stay peacefully there. But it turned out that our character was actually part of one's soul, a memory that is unique to its own kind. Each memory is unique and stores so many emotions, past events and maybe things we do not want to even remember. I did not expect such a turn into this work. Still, I am thrilled by its concept. I do not know if the concept of the dancing happy ones were that some memories were of emotional and positive events or something that is totally out of this road that I am currently walking on but this is how I understood it and it also gives them a special meaning. I love your little remarks in between the work to specify for us what is going on because the reader would get confused. And it was like a little sneak peek towards the real meaning of the work. It was very touching in the end to give the memory a reason, giving the gray something light of hope. A heart.
He sees many other figures—some nameless and dull like himself, others -/, vibrant and dancing across the ground.
They float more than anything, like spirits. (great sentence, it caught my eye the most and it gives enough information for the creatures)
So, it gives him the impression that it can see everything he is, and everything he is made of, and again, something like a feeling but not quite a feeling put-puts through him.
Keep on writing!
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