This poem feels like it follows a theory of, "it's not what you say, it's how you say it that makes it unique." What I mean is, this poem seems to have a simple plot if you will, but says what it means to say in a unique way. Forgive me if that is wrong, but that analysis leads me to believe that, while this piece certainly sounds unique, it isn't a very good kind of unique. I think the underlying problem here is word choice. The shorter the poem the better the choices have to be, which makes it harder on you, the author. I would love to see something along these lines, except with maybe more body and better phrasing.
Cheers,
Poop guy
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