Hey, LordWolf! I'm finally here to review your poem.
i saw your profile through the rounded window
i saw you standing out in the rain
and with each glance i wanted to be with you again. i wanted to be with you again.
sweet songs sung through busted head phones
Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on your work, and to help get this work out the green room. Okay let's begin.So this was a really well written poem and I really liked it. But I did see one or two things I would like to point out. So the first thing is the color of the words. I'm not quit sure how you made the background yellow, but having the words white is a little hard to read. me being some one who needs glasses to read some times, it does strain the eyes. The next thing is were to repeat a sentence.
I wanted to be with you again.
I'm such a fan of your writing Although it's a terrific piece from the first word to the last, the fourth stanza is truly superb. It's so beautiful I wouldn't mind it being framed in my room. Your talent is absolutely evident here .
Hey there! Toboldlygo here for a review! First of all, I'm so sorry sorry, I'm doing this on my phone and I'm almost guaranteed to have typos/weird things because I'm not great at typing on phones.On to the review! I think at first glance the white text on yellow print is rather hard to read. And maybe that was intentional, so if so, yay it worked, but if not, something to consider. I loved the romantic appeal of the poem and how touching it was. It just seemed to evoke so many beautiful images of old people still very much in love, or maybe even old meeting meeting and falling in love and wishing they jad always been together. It's beautiful and so personal and full of sentiment. On a few technical details, I did notice there were some lines that seemed to trail off. The last verse in particular had an opening line that seemed a little choppy. Maybe capitalizaing the letters in it? Having a period and a new sentence on the new line is what it think could be better. Maybe if you put the next sentence on a new line?Overall , beautiful poem! You should be proud!Happy Writing!Toboldlygo
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