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Nostalgia - Chapter 4 (Part 1 of 2)

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Nostalgia was the same when Cora returned. The dresses hung in their exact same spots and the refreshing summer scent smelled as sweet as ever. There was not even a need for Cora to hunt down the dresses she had picked out earlier; they hung slightly lopsided in the change room, just the way she had left them. It was if the store had been frozen in time, waiting.

Cora no longer felt inclined to try on the long lilac gown she had been interested in a few days before. When she looked at it again, it no longer held charm as an innocent, slightly old-fashioned item. Instead, it was a frumpy violet with awkward, jewelled hemming. Perhaps, subconsciously, it was Cora’s rekindled fantasies of a romance with Cadogan Sage that now urged her to approach one of the dresses hiding in the back of her selection – a pink and white plaid, cap-sleeved, cotton dress that reached to just above the knees. Quickly removing her own, now seemingly average, blue and white polka-dotted item, Cora eagerly zipped herself into the new dress. After tying the sash in the back, she looked up into the mirror.

It was stunning. She wasn’t stunning, but the dress was. The dress made everything, from gathering perfectly at the waist to complimenting her pale skin tone. Cora felt like a nineteen-fifties style Alice in Wonderland. But what’s a dress if it doesn’t twirl? Closing her eyes, black lashes lining her lids like minute feather, Cora began to spin. She felt the skirt, made of stiff cotton, balloon out and slightly graze her hands – a most delicate touch. She kept twirling and twirling, lost in her whimsical dance. And then tripped on her feet and tumbled to the ground. Her eyes flew open.

She was not in the change room.

Cora was sitting on a blue cloth that was set on the side of a lush, grassy hill. An array of picnic foods were laid out: fresh bread, gooey camembert, thick slices of comte, garlicky green olives, shocking red slices of tomato, ripe avocado, swirled hummus, prosciutto as thin as tissue paper, jello salad with thin slices of carrot, blackberries that oozed purple stains, peaches that when rubbed against your skin felt like a soft, bearded embrace. Two plates and appropriate silverware were set, one in front of Cora and the other directly opposite. Crystal goblets full of refreshingly irresistible Bordeaux white wine twinkled in the hot sun’s afternoon rays.

Looking around, Cora noticed that she was seated on the side of the hill, in a meadow intermittently dotted with majestic oaks and absolutely covered in lupins and yarrow. Fat bumblebees buzzed lazily from flower to flower, running their afternoon errands. For a second, Cora was fearful: she was alone and she didn’t know where she was or how she had gotten here. But scanning the horizon, she noticed a young man, dressed smartly in navy blue trousers and a white button-up shirt with cuffed sleeves, walking purposefully towards her. As he approached, Cora could not help but remark that he looked very much like Cadogan, with soft, wispy hair and a thin build. Even his demeanour, which emanated cheerfully yet quietly from his being, was akin to Cadogan’s.

But he was not Cadogan because when he opened his mouth, he said, “I’m back, but there were no serviettes in the truck! I seem to have forgotten them, Alice love.”

Cora supposed that now was not the time to break the news to the handsome gentleman that not only had he forgotten the serviettes, but that the alleged girl he was on a date with was actually not Alice.

“Oh, it’s okay. We’ll survive,” Cora replied. As he sat, she noticed that his car keys had a tag with the name George Walters, so she added, “George dear.” George leaned over and Cora stiffened in apprehension. He planted a soft kiss on her cheek and returned back to his position across from her.

“Shall we start?” the man said brightly, lifting his wine glass. Cora followed suit. “To this day and our love.” They clinked glasses. Cora watched as George broke some bread in half and began to pile tomatoes, cheese, and prosciutto on top to create a delectable sandwich. She grabbed just a handful of berries.

“So it’s a brand new dress? You got it from Sally’s?” said George, obviously wanting to initiate conversation. Problem was, Cora didn’t know who Sally was. Or even what was going on in this instant. Some man named George was acting like they had known each other for years, even though he was calling her Alice. But Cora thought the best thing was to just go along with it all.

“Yes. It’s very comfortable. Do you like it?” Cora popped a blackberry into her mouth. There was an explosion of flavour – perfectly ripe.

George nodded enthusiastically. “It looks stunning on you. I’m glad Sally’s shop is able to cater to the whims of a dress aficionado such as you.” He winked.

So this Alice girl was obsessed with dresses as well? A good sign. Cora would be able to play along with this. She repositioned herself, grabbed a hunk of bread and began to slather hummus on top. It was like she was prepping for battle. And, in a way, she was. Preparing to battle this crazy, unrealistic situation. Where am I?

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Chaser
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Chaser wrote a review · Sun Sep 27, 2015 5:39 pm

Happy Review Day! *Loads Gatling gun*

I have not read the previous chapters, so I can't say much for the plot, other than that it's intriguing, and brings out Cora's character well through her thoughts and observations. It also seems sweet that the fantasy somewhat involves Cadogan. Now then:

Your characters, as has been said, seem excellent. George seems like a typically easygoing character, with a gentle and warm dialogue, as well as his initial descriptions, while Cora is fittingly cunning as a protagonist. Her acute observations both provide stunning detail and allow the audience a peek into her sharp mind. Seeing her adapt to her strange situation gave the audience an excellent feel for her character.

Regarding your style, it's wonderfully descriptive, and does a good job of placing the reader into the dream-like setting. And with the connection already drawn to Alice in Wonderland, the reader is free to imagine the world without the sensation of confusion completely strangling their imagination. Clever work!
While the vivid descriptions were a bit on the longer side, every word contributed to the wonderful tone you've set up. The setting is as clear as day in my mind.

Overall, it's an excellent work with a powerful description, and fascinating characters moving along an intriguing plot. Cheers!


-Chaser

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artybirdy
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Happy Review Day!

I haven’t read the previous chapters and, hence, this review will only be based on this one.

I felt that Cora was awfully calm for someone who was transported into an entirely different dimension. Unless that’s her character, I’d say it’s not very realistic. I’m also confused as to why she doesn’t correct him when he calls her Alice and plays along instead, almost like she expected herself to meet him. But, the last sentence suggests she has no idea about it. She’s not panicking or is scared, at least that’s what it seemed like. I’m curious as to why only she can travel into another world. I love your descriptions though; I’m fascinated by them because they appear effortless and provided me with vivid imagery, especially of the picnic. I enjoyed reading this. Great job!

Well done, and keep writing!



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