Young Writers Society

Hey JadeLous!

Here's your review, as requested. I really enjoyed reading this poem, and it put a smile on my face.
I know you said that you intended for it to be relatable, and I definitely felt that.

One thing that came up for me:

We've got energy.

To search Web M.D.

It will break my heart.

I can't add to cart.

Hey there, Sofie here with a review

I enjoyed reading this poem immensely. It's fun, lighthearted, and, I think, very relatable to a lot of people in our generation. I think you also did a fantastic job at establishing the rhythm and rhyme scheme of the poem. It's very musical, I could really feel the beat of every line. I feel like these would make great song lyrics!

Good job on this! Keep working on your poetry

Hello dear friend!

I'm here to give you a review, just like you requested! Firstly, I love how lighthearted this poem is. Also, I love the way you wrote 'Why, Internet?' at the end. It gives it a very very very good ending. Good job on that! I didn't see spelling mistakes, but i did see two other stuff that I'd like to point out. If you look here:

"We beg it to go,

Up a bit."

I don't think a comma is needed. Because it makes it sound very chop-chop-choppy. Anyhoo, next one:

"No Kid's reacting."

I don't think 'Kid's' needs to be capitalized, unless it's a reference. I'm pretty sure it isn't though, lol. Anyways, that's it from me. Hope this helped, and I can't wait to see more of your wonderful lighthearted poems. I honestly love this so much!

---Butterfly---

Hey! Che here for a quick review

I loved this poem. I loved how much I could relate to it and how relevant it is to society nowadays! I live in an area known for having an notoriously bad internet connection so i really could relate to the countdown of bars.

The only grammatical error I could see was:

No Kid's reacting.

Hey Jade! FlamingPhoenix here with a few things to say about your poem, and to help get it out the green room for you on this sunny day.
I'll try and make this short.

Okay let's get to it shall we.

So out of the whole poem I only saw one thing wrong with it.

No clickbait action,

I love how relatable this is to me! xD
Every day is such a struggle cuz we have sucky Wifi... so this really connected to me on a deeper level. It's humorous, and the ending line sums it up greatly!

I feel like we really do take three bars for granted... and until reaching that last bar, that's when you know it's over...

Anyway, I loved reading through this and I also enjoyed the many references in this!

Hey Jade!
This is obviously very relatable and pretty funny! It's a good (nice) way of saying you love\hate the Internet!
Nothing jumped out at me that I would need to point out or anything. Even though the syllables and rhyming are all wacky, it weirdly flows and I didn't have to reread anything so I guess it can't be too wacky! It is lighthearted even though sometimes I can feel like killing the Internet! The last verse...?...is a PERFECT ending!
I also love most of the things you were talking about lol. Especially "Kid's React." Those are always funny! Although, "Elder's React" is even better because basically, it is a bunch of old people being shown new music! It's hilarious!
Anyway, I really like it!
Keep up the good work!!
Your friend,
Honora

I like it! This is a very lighthearted poem, just like you said. I like the... I don't know the word. Um, what's the word?? Whatever, I'll mention it later if it comes to me. But, I really like how you mentioned YouTube, Buzzfeed, Web M.D., etc. Good job! Can't wait to see more from you!