It Was The Color Of Your Hair

In every friendship, something like this happens. You see your friend as someone who can't be broken and you lean on them so much that it starts to hurt them too and you don't even know it. You see them as such a hero that you place them on a pedestal and you're right, you forget they're human. I love how you captured that and placed it in words. I loved the way you did that. It was beautifully and honestly done. I have a friend just like this that I love deeply and it fits him so well. You know someone's a good writer when you can relate to their poetry so much that you can see the person just after the first stanza. I congratulate you. You're the first person to ever do that with their poetry whenever I read it. GREAT job, my dear.


Love,

CateRose

Legacy here for a review.

I understand this poem in a spiritual way. I love how this shows how someone that is strong headed unintentionally hurts someone (a common trope) in an uncommon way. Your capitalization and punctuation are well used and do not take away from the poem at all. Your note at the bottom seems like it is unneeded (in my opinion), as I couldn't find the reference you are talking about (I might not see it, please enlighten me). I don't see anything that you need to change.

That's all I have for you, Legacy out.

Hiya! Space here for a review!

Wow, even though this poem was short and very straight-forward, the message it sent about you and the best friend was very strong. You were the one who wanted to be her friend, you didn't see the pain she was going through because you were too young and didn't understand, but now you have both gotten older and learned and are still close friends. I think something I got from this was that you/the protagonist learned, and began to understood as you/they got older, and you/them understand now and that held the friendship together.

I personally saw it as a very close relationship, if not a bit rocky at first due to the young age and the "demons" the friend was going through, but the fact that the friendship stayed together despite that and they both learned, shows that it is a very strong relationship.

(You also clearly saw her as an idol, which I got from the line "I wanted to be friends with that pretty girl I just met", "you say you weren't popular, but that's news to me", and "because I believed that you were invincible.")

It was a great poem, and really heart-felt too. Great job!

-Space the Snickerdoodle

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To you who this poem is about (and you know who you are), I love you so much and I just know we're going to be friends forever!
-ME