One Thing

I love this short story in every single sense. I can't find very many components of this story that need to be changed or altered, as I love it just the way that it is. It captures perfectly how a person feels when caught in this sort of situation.
I don't know what sort of fanfiction this is. Could you at least include a name so that I could have a hint as to what fanbase it's from? Otherwise, there is no reason to call it a fanfiction.
Secondly, a few of the sentences aren't dynamic enough. Reread and trying to make them more so.
Finally, I hope that you have a wonderful day and I hope that you continue writing because it seems to be a gift for you! Continue the wonderful work!

Timmyjake here to leave you a review!

I will just hit my little nitpicks!!

At the first paragraph

I want you so badly, but I don't tell you.

Sorry, I haven't quite figured out the neat quotes. I think it would work better if you said, "I can't tell you."

No other person can make me a stuttering mess in less that two seconds, nor can they appear so fragile that I feel I would wrestle a lion to protect them.

This line doesn't really seem to work. For one, you talk about weakness and fragility in one part of the sentence, then you say you would wrestle lions? I think it would work better if you said that you would lay down your life for them or something.

This almost seems like a love note to someone you love, but doesn't seem to love you back... until the end. Some parts seem too short for me to fully grasp what you mean, for instance the third and fourth section, but with everything else it was great! Unlike Baal, I really liked this!! Keep writing!
~Timmyjake

Thank you very much. And seeing that @baal here didnt at all like it, it doen't matter to me. Just knowing that you wrote it because i requested you to made me absolutely love it. Thank you very very much. Merry xmas!

Hey there ....
Can i tell you how amazing your work is , i see that you used some sentences from one directions song one thing , i'm i right ?

You must not have been inspired when writing this. It doesn't have a spark, anything to set it apart from all the myriad sappy love stories contaminating the internet. The reference to the song is unoriginal, the lyrics are actually quoted outright. That's very lazy. Something more subtle could have been done, a nod to a particular verse. I can't even call this a reinterpretation of the lyrics themselves, it's literally two paragraphs, sitting there, separated by parts of the song.

Your character is not defined, your character is not interesting. People read love stories because they want to be caught up in a breathtaking drama that will change the rest of their lives permanently for the duration of the train home. This, on the other hand, has absolutely nothing. Resignation, angst, all those 'key words' are there. I don't know anything about your character, nor, at this point, am I prompted to be curious. A little more effort could have gone into setting your character apart. Some expression, a particular way of viewing her situation, a certain thing she does, anything to make me say 'well you don't see that very often!'. Or, even if she does do exactly the same thing every friendzoned teen protagonist does, at least present it in an entertaining manner. As things are now, I just wasted five precious minutes I could have spent in a more constructive fashion, such as staring at the ceiling.