To my ex boyfriend,
Fear is something we all have and cause.
Courage is not having no fear at all,
But courage is finding the strength to face your fears.
Pain is another thing we all feel and inflect.
It is not a weakness.
It is weakness leaving us.
The desitions I made may not be the brightest.
Nor have they been well thought out.
But they are not stupid ones for causing this.
The 'mistakes' I make are not mistakes.
Every desition forms my path and road we travel together.
It changes who we are and our lives.
I wouldnt change all the things I've done.
The fear I have caused you.
Nor your pain I have made you endure.
I am sorry if, no that I have hurt you.
But I wouldnt take it back if it has taught you something.
Who am I to take the right to learn and grow stronger from you.
If the things we did or felt never happened.
We might not have become friends.
Might not even ever have met each other.
I would never trade any of that.
I hope you agree.
Love you for better or worse.
Love Your Sorry Rriend, Kiaya
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Good basis for a poem, but first of all, correct the spelling errors:
"Corage" should be "courage."
"Desitions" should be "decisions."
Spell out the word "are" - this is a poem, not a text message. If you want people to respect it as a poem, write it like a poem.
"I" should be capitalized.
"Wouldnt" should be "wouldn't."
"Eather" should be "either."
"Im" should be "I'm."
I'm a little confused by this stanza:
Are you talking to fear and pain? In that case, you should add a comma between "you" and "fear," at the end of the second line, between "you" and "pain," and between "pain" and "either."
I'm also confused a little over all - it seems like you change topics halfway through the poem. You start off by talking about fear, pain, and courage and what they are, but then you start talking to a friend whom you've apparently done wrong by. I think there may actually be two poems in here. If you find them, you'll have not one but two good poems to work with.
Hope this helped!
~Blue