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This made me tear up! I love the last line!
Hello Hello, sorry it took me so long to get to this, I have not been able to get on the computer.
So, I looked at this a little while after you posted it, I didn't reveiw because I didn't find much wrong and because I really liked it. This is a good poem, and it does remind me of the other one. At first I thought to just did a major rewrite... Well... I think this poem is really good, anything I was going to suggest to fix has already been pointed out. Sorry I couldn't have been of more help...
~Rain~
hi, Pointe here as requested.
First of all thank you for saying my work is impressive, if you ever have the time please review some!
this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
is this from a girls point of view? or a boys? Because at the beginning it sounds like a girl to me
However an end to me is but a beginning,
A new dream, I count on winning,
So I walk forward to the beat of the drum,
A game of hearts, it's now become.
Still the hopeless game for love is lost,
The bridge to solitude, has now been crossed,
But know your here, inside of me,
A special place, there will always be.
I have no complaints about this poem, its well written and is constructed in a sublime way.
~pointe
Hi -
Well, one can say, that we who write have good imagination and things that we write about never happend in real life.
But i say, that all that we write is just what happend in real life, but we can make is sound unreal.
So what you wrote is great and true, and that's what i mostly enjoy in such works.
Good luck!
GG
WOW!I love this poem! Keep writing
Hi J.R.S,
Wow! This didn't just touch my heart, but struck it with empowering emotion! Beautiful. Something else I'll compliment you on is the title, "The Thought Inside My Heart". The brilliant title is what drew me to this poem in the first place. It was written so beautifully and gently, and I could feel it coming, pouring from deep within your soul. That is what really makes poems like these worth reading. Poems that are soul-deep and leave you in absolute awe. The timing and layout of this poem were also very good!
This deserves more than a round of applause! Best wishes for future writing!
RedLeaf