I don't know what it is about you that makes it hard to forget. Maybe it's the way I fell for your words, breaking me of my self-consciousness. The way you still wrapped your arms around me knowing I don't like my stomach being touched. Maybe it's the way my hand fit inside yours, like a baby in a basket. I don't know what it is, but it goes way back to before there even was a you and me. The way your words slurred while telling me I'm beautiful. You were drunk and I had a boyfriend then. I still found myself looking after you at school though, searching for you in the crowded halls, hoping to talk to you. We drifted apart, yet you still found your way back to me and I constantly wonder why that could be. But I still don't know why I can't forget about you. Maybe it's the way your lips on mine created sparks. Maybe it's the way that you made me realize that you're everything I never knew I needed. Everything was an experiment at first, we never thought either of us would catch real feelings. But maybe it's the way I believed you when you told me you'd never leave and you did anyway. Yet, I still believe that there's something that we could be, that's why I can't forget about you.
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hello,
I'm Ranay:
If you went through this I hope things got better but I just wanted to say we all go through this one time or another. It's a suckish feeling I know but it helps us grow up and learn lessons that might need to be learned. In my opinion, I also think there's always going to be that one person we wont be able to forget no matter how hard we try whether the relationship ended on good terms or bad terms. if it ended on bad terms you can use it as strength and just tell yourself its another trial you had to go through to get to where you are now. You can also see it as a decision you made that helped change you instead of a regret. Either way this was well written and it had me on the verge of tears because it was also bringing me back to my past to the person I'm unable to forget as well.
keep up the good work. ^^
Thank you very much. Sorry it almost made you cry, didn't want that to happen. Just had all this built up and had to let it out. My words are the best way I knew how. I know one day it'll get easier and better to understand. Thank you again!
No need to apologize, I've been quite emotional lately anyway so that's my fault lol
Hi there Andy!
However, the "there's nothing special about me" thing is something that everyone thinks and that makes it quite boring. And something else I'd like clarification on is that doesn't the boyfriend's hand fit with the girl's or create sparks with his kiss, like the other guy seems to do? Does the girl not like her boyfriend that much? I guess not, if she keeps thinking about the other one.
I guess my first and most obvious question/point of wonderment is that I'm not sure what exactly this is... I guess that's why it's in "Other"! It could be a poem experiment or a plan for a story, or just a kind of diary entry, which is what it seems like now. The uncertainty makes it quite difficult to review, but I'll try to say a few things, anyway.
I like the conflict between the girl that is interested in the guy but she is with something else. That's pretty classic drama, so what's not to like.
I'm not sure how helpful my review is considering I'm not sure what kind of work this is, but hopefully you get something out of it
Demeter
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Thank you very much for your review. I guess this was just my thoughts at the moment and I needed to let them out. But I see what you're saying about clarification. There is no boyfriend, there's just this guy who the girl can't forget about. I'll see what I can do to clarify things. Thank you again!
I made a few changed, you should let me know what you think?
I guess there's a magic in your writing which makes me really sad. The way you write, although to the point and precise, really is amazing. I really wanted it to be another amazing poem from you but well, it was still good. I really liked reading you and I am really sorry for whatever is happening in your life.
But leaving everything aside, you are a great writer and I really hope you won't stop writing. I wish to read something from your side on a daily basis.
But for now, don't feel low. You are great!
Do let me know if I can help you in any way possible. Thanks for sharing such a great piece of work. Thanks a lot.
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for your review and I'll try writing a happy poem for you to read someday soon!
Looking forward to it
You are great!