To, The River

WOW. I really loved this poem!

With this short poem, you described the whole journey of the River. The following lines are the ones I loved the most:

"Each time I come to discover you
You are not you but something new"

There's a clarity of thought that is depicted in your way of writing the poem. And the oneness of the self with the river is absolutely a great concept!

"And for once, come to a halt" This line hit me differently. Its like a spiritual concept you brought out, like the going back to the higher entity, from where you originally came.

I really look forward to read your work! Keep writing!

Best wishes,
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Hi @GreyMatter. I don not fall for poetry very easily. But you have done a great work ...

Being a nature lover . I could feel what you wrote and this is the way how I feel. I too feel very fascinated looking at river . I enjoyed how you explained the journey of river. telling about newness of river, desire to flow away with it , exploring a new place is what all I loved about it.

I just love the first TWO lines. I can not stop reading them.They are beautifully written.
As poem went on I could visualize the whole experience...
loved the ending as well...

All the best for future poems!!!
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Em, I'm not actually a native English-speaking guy. I mean, English isn't my first language. So, I don't know that much about poetry. But this was fantastic, and I thought I should share my feelings.

I like the depth of this piece. You went with it a nice flow like the river you mentioned. The theme is excellent. Flowing with the river, moving into unknown horizons, then finally halting to meet the ocean. It was really an excellent theme.

I love these lines:

'Together we shall flow

Not one bank visited twice'

'Let restlessness be our vice'

'Until that day of reckoning

When the ocean beckoning'

'And for once, come to a halt'

Like I said, I'm not an expert. I just wanted to say I loved this.

Hi there, GreyMatter! Niteowl here to review.

Overall, I like the idea of addressing the river and wanting to join it. I also had never heard of that definition of the word "apostrophe", so that was fun. The opening lines are interesting--presenting the river as a stream of consciousness is both a play on words and some nice personification. The speaker then goes on to idealize the roaming nature of the river as they imagine traveling with it.

One thing that sticks out to me is that sometimes you use an ABAB rhyme scheme, and other times an AABB scheme. You might consider making it more consistent.

Each time I come to discover you

You are not you but something new

This newness I desire too

I too yearn to drift away

To swirl down, to sail off with you

Until that day of reckoning

When the ocean beckoning

Calls us to unite

For all of the eternity

Hello, GreyMatter! As you've probably guessed, I'm here to review your poem.
I really enjoyed the FLOW of the poem! (See what I did there) It was a smooth read, and your word choice was great. I also didn't see many spelling/grammar errors, either. So good job!
However, my one gripe with this is that it seems a little all over the place with its focus. It starts out seeming like it's about being left behind, then it seems to be about adventure, and then it's about rejoining one whole. I don't know, though, that's what I got out of it.
Other than that, it was very well written, and I really enjoyed it. I look forward to reading more from you in the future! Have a great day!