Why do I hate you, you ask?
I just do. I hate you and everything about you.
I hate your face. They way it looks really good when you smile. I hate that, too. That goofy smile of yours and how it's so contagious.
I hate your beautiful dark hair, your bright blue eyes, your stupid jokes; I hate how they always make me laugh, even when they aren't funny.
I hate the way you make me feel. I hate how you just came out of nowhere and made me fall so hard. I hate you.
I hate that every time you hold my hand I seem to disintegrate and my mind just shuts down.
I hate the way you laugh, too. I hate the way it sounds so refreshing; every time you laugh I feel like the world isn't so bad. Like everything just might work out.
I hate the way you don't make sense in my life. I hate how everything is messed up, and then there's you. I hate how when I'm with you I seem to forget everything and everyone around me.
I hate how I try not to think about you, but for some reason you always find your way back into my thoughts.
I hate how you ruined everything.
I hate you, and I hate how I've fallen madly in love with you.
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This is such a beautiful piece! I could really relate to it, and feel the frustration of the speaker through the constantly use of “I hate you”. It’s intense in a way. You have superbly brushed over the traits which might seem attractive to someone. I didn’t pay much attention to the technical/structural bits, but more to the content. So, I didn’t find any errors.
Well done!
Hello there, sorry i'm new here so I haven't really done many reviews but anyway..
Anyway this was a great poem!
I thought this was a very good poem and i agree with chancesnchanges when they said that you truly love them which is especially shown in the last line.I liked how the second last line was so short as it had a lot of impact " I hate how you ruined everthing ". I didn't notice any spelling errors or grammatical errors
Keep us posted and happy writing!
Matisse
Hello there, sorry i'm new here so I haven't really done many reviews but anyway..
Anyway this was a great poem!
I thought this was a very good poem and i agree with chancesnchanges when they said that you truly love them which is especially shown in the last line.I liked how the second last line was so short as it had a lot of impact " I hate how you ruined everthing ". I didn't notice any spelling errors or grammatical errors
Keep us posted and happy writing!
Matisse
Hi! there GrapeNerd
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*just have to suppress my smile… ok* I like the irony you used to clearly state what you really feel. It sounded like someone ranting but deep within those hate-cover-ups are actually the ones that you truly love about the person. Thus, I didn't see any typo's or punctuation errors.
*This thought popped in my mind after reading your piece.
I believe that when you're saying that in front of the person you love, in no time you've been clasped in his/her arms.*
Continue writing
> Cha
Aw, thank you! I never thought of that! Actually, I started writing this as a conversation through a phone, but I changed some stuff. Thanks again!
This is a great poem, it really portrays the emotiosn quite well and flows brilliantly.
I can't find any major things wrong with this. Just eight lines up from the bottom you put 'I hate the way it sounds so refreshing, like, every time you laugh...'. I think it would sound better without the comma after like.
Apart from that it's excellent.
Aw, thank you! Yeah, i agree, it does sound better without the comma, however it's supposed to be like that. You know, like how most kids talk nowadays.