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Considering I haven't actually read part one, let's see how this goes!
This was really good, although I didn't understand the last line fully, perhaps you could explain it?
My only piece of constructive criticsm would be to advise you to put periods at the end of each stanza. This isn't obligatory, but considering your stanzas don't lead directly on from one another this might be a good idea.
A well written poem, good job!
Hi there!
First off I want to say that I think this is really good. I read the first part as well and they both fit perfectly together. It's sort of like you told a story and this is the sequel to it. You did a great job running them together and not leaving the reader with any questions or confusion.
This poem has amazing imagery, along with the first part of this. I was reading through it and thinking, wow. Yeah, it's that good. The flow is great and i didn't see any place where it faltered. Keep up the good work!
Keep writing!