Hi, Anice here for review ^_^
The poem was a nice read. Thanks for sharing! "Life's a Roller coaster" is quit a common sentiment among many. Whenever anything shocking or bewildering happens, there's always this sentence showing up.
Despite the size, the imagery and sentiments attached to it appeared heartfelt. I could continuously imagine the pace. And the little depth at the end by insinuating to an end to all the happy, sad hours of life made it more memorable. The words are appropriate and nicely put, the structure adding up to it all.
The thing that came to my mind while reading it was that the theme was detached and impersonal. There is hardship, the pain of living, but the expressions weren't enough to make it much more than simply words said.
It may be your kind of thing choosing themes like this but it's always recommended that themes should at some point derive from life or carry some piece of self to be able to become a piece relatable by the lots. Artist creates thing by carving and tracing himself in his arts. The detachment from the narrative is appreciable but when there is detachment from the theme of the art, there the words become just simple words and statements.
It would be amazing if you could add something much more relatable to it all. Once again thank you for sharing your work and have a nice day!
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