It’s a beautiful and touching poem. I liked the ideas behind the poem. The sentences you have used captivated me and convinced me that pain can be a blessing and that there is a purpose of every tear that has fallen from our eyes. I liked the concept that suffering, tragedy, love and joy is beauty but how can be tragedy be beauty?
“ It’s time to look for the rose in the thorns
the calm within the storm, the light in the night
Enough of sorrow and fear we can rise above that and be true to who we are
We can live a life
We can be free from all”
This lines are motivating enough for any reader. I believe that great efforts have been put in to make this poem so beautiful.
I have a few suggestions not intended to offend you. Apologies if I do-
Where you have written-
“I often wonder myself as I gaze out at our beautiful world”
I think here myself is a bit appropriate. The sentence can covey it’s meaning without using myself.
And instead of saying that pain has its blessings you can also say that pain is a blessing.
Overall A graet poem and I am keen to read more of your poems.
Points: 98
Reviews: 3
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