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It is ... Confusing. Probably because I haven't read the previous chapters but still at places I don't get the idea if Dominic is sleeping or not and who's dangerous for who ... I could see the point with traveling trough the forest and stuff but it's a bit too fairytale-ish for me and I'm also getting the feeling that some parts are taken from Twilight.
This could use a lot of work but this is just my opinion.