Young Writers Society

Hi there! Jumping in for a review here. I was super excited to see a poem written in Spanish so I figured I would leave some feedback because it was indeed beautifully written!

I like, specifically, the last stanza -- the idea of unrequited love (or any feeling that is not reciprocated, honestly) is a heartbreaking yet tragically beautiful realization to come to, which is why the last stanza stood out to me so much.

"Pero siempre no soy tuya."

I like that you chose such a powerful sentence to end the poem -- with just a few words, you tied in the idea of unreciprocated love.

The rest of the poem is equally as poignant, and I like that you use imagery, particularly in "Los arboles tiemblan como yo"; imagery and metaphors/similes are always an effective way to convey feelings and that works very well in this particular poem.

I actually don't have any suggestions for this poem aside from maybe providing an English translation underneath the original or maybe publishing a second version in English. However, I can see why this may be problematic (the Spanish original is just so much more powerful), so great job regardless -- I loved this poem!

My review is at the end. Just for anyone who doesn't speak Spanish, but doesn't want to translate this:

"The crows shout your name
When I walk in the dark.
In the silence I can hear your voice,
I always want to hear your voice.

The trees tremble like me;
The leaves fall and float
Like me when I am with you.
I could always fall and float.

My feelings went with you
How the snow melts
Without prior notice.
Everything always happened without warning.

I remember you told me
"Forever,
Forever you are mine. ”
But I am not always yours."

This poem is rather beautiful. The wording and detail you put in this is wonderful.